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Earth Angel
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0 posted 2009-07-20 09:38 AM


    

The Crone
by Linda L. Dowd

As scudding clouds crossed waning moon
Long shadows drank up lambent light
With piercing scream, I reeled in swoon.
~ And wrapped wool cloak around me tight.

My eyes were wide in primal fear,
As darkness crept o’er crypt and bier.
Before me loomed a bent, old crone.
~ Which chilled me through from skin to bone.

Dead leaves were rustling, swirling ‘round.
Tree branches creaked in blust’ry gale.
Night creatures stalked the barren ground,
In search of victims weak and frail.

I could not move nor could I speak.
My throat was dry.~ My knees were weak.
As clouds dispersed and Luna cleared,
~ The horrid crone just disappeared!

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© Copyright 2009 Linda L. Dowd - All Rights Reserved
A Romantic Heart
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1 posted 2009-07-20 09:50 AM




OOOOOO....I am scared!!!!!

Chill bumps and all...


I love scary stories, you tell some good ones!

Scary Angel

D.Lester Young
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2 posted 2009-07-20 09:59 AM


The poetic chill of excellence done in magical verse.
Margherita
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3 posted 2009-07-20 09:59 AM


Uhhhhhh, shuddering, dear Angelo Terrestre! Good that sunshine is here to allow fear to disappear!

This Rispetto is written with incredibly vivid imagery and conveys emotions ... of primal fear!

Do I hear your muse giggling?

You are a treat, always, dear Poetess of Dark and Light!

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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4 posted 2009-07-20 02:14 PM


You are so good at this kind of poetry, Linda I bet you are a great deal of fun for children. I would have loved this when I was a child... Love it now.
                                Ida

Heart2Heart
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5 posted 2009-07-20 02:38 PM


You combine every aspect needed to write wonderful classic poesy in this fantastic poem Linda.  A most delightful pleasure to read you dear lady.
Heart2Heart (Katriona)

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6 posted 2009-07-20 05:19 PM


So wonderfully spooky.  I can't wait for the moon to return so I can search for the crone.

Thank you.
Alison

Ericc
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7 posted 2009-07-20 05:23 PM


wow...this is awesome and so very lyrical!
brneyedgrly
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8 posted 2009-07-20 08:39 PM



~lovely linda...

you are so good...

these structures blend wonderfully with your writing style!

you...are effortless  

love ya,
ss
shel


Billie Cullimore
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9 posted 2009-07-20 11:03 PM




  Love it, Love it,  I hope this was a
Halloween night. I could feel the chill up my spine.

You do sooo good work.

Love 'un stuff
Billie C.

Klassy Lassy
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10 posted 2009-07-21 02:13 AM


...now I shall have to cover my unguarded head all night.  I'll be looking over my shoulder at every moonbeam, and I'm going to have to shut the closet door.
I just looked in the mirror,and the wart on my nose is gone! That's what happens when an old crone meets an angel! Hare today and goon tomorrow.  


  Karen

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11 posted 2009-07-21 12:09 PM


dear Linda, you make me improve my english and enjoyed both the photo (like tim burton film) and the poem...

thanks for the lovely poem.

yann

kudanesh
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12 posted 2009-07-21 04:50 PM


I loved this I am not very well done and as you know I live poems that rhyme thank you for this briliant read


LindsayP
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13 posted 2009-07-21 10:58 PM



I could not move nor could I speak.
My throat was dry.~ My knees were weak.
As clouds dispersed and Luna cleared,
~ The horrid crone just disappeared!

My dear Linda I'm so glad that horrible
crone dissappeared and that it didn't cause

you any grief. You are spot on with your rhyme and rhythm as you always are. Love to
you my dear friend.

Lindsay


Oklahoma Rose
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14 posted 2009-07-22 11:34 PM


Well, I am glad that crone just disappeared. Another fantastic write Earthy One!
Earth Angel
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15 posted 2009-07-23 11:59 AM


ARH ~

You've been known to tell a tall, dark tale as well! I'm pleased you a thrill out of mine, so to speak! lol


EA

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16 posted 2009-07-23 12:02 PM


DLY ~

I like how you put that! Thank you!

Beware! Stay out of graveyards at night!


EA

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17 posted 2009-07-23 12:06 PM


Margherita que Bonita ~

My muse amuses me! She take me ~ and my pen ~ on the wildest journeys at times! She has more than the Seven Faces of Eve!

With all your radiant Light, I'm sure you will frighten off even the scariest of crones!


Linda AT

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18 posted 2009-07-23 12:09 PM


Marchmadness ~

Thank you, my dear Ida Belle. Actually, when my children were younger, their friends would knock on our door and ask me to 'come out and play'. lol I'd entertain them by playing my guitar and singing my children songs, and reading my stories and poems. Those times were very special to me and I treasure those warm memories.

Love to you, my CA friend,
Linda

Earth Angel
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19 posted 2009-07-23 12:11 PM


2 ~

That was kind of you to say, Katriona! ~ as you must surely know by now, that is how I feel about your writing!

Thank you!


Linda

Earth Angel
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20 posted 2009-07-23 12:13 PM


Alison ~

You are most welcome! ~ and thank YOU!

I've met some of the most peculiar creatures when I go for my midnight strolls through graveyards. ~ NOT! They scare the livin' bejeezes out of this little 'angel'!!!


Linda

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21 posted 2009-07-23 12:17 PM


Eric ~

Loved your "WOW!" It's even bigger than a "wow!" lol

This was my first attempt at a Rispetto and I like the 'lyricity' of this form!

Thanks for stopping by!


Linda

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22 posted 2009-07-23 12:19 PM


Brown-eyed Beauty ~

I'm really enjoying trying out these poetic forms that I'm learning in the Poetry Workshop. It's stretching me as a poet and I love to learn and grow!

Thanks, my little ss!

Loveya!
Linda

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23 posted 2009-07-23 12:21 PM


Billie C ~

You have me grinning from ear to ear with your enthusiastic response! I love that you "love it"! It was fun to write! I got into the 'spirit' of it!


Linda

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24 posted 2009-07-23 12:27 PM


Klassy One ~

Yer a charmer, Karen! Your sense of humour often elicits a chuckle out of me! ~ and I got at least 2 out of this delightful response by you!

Yer a clever beauty! ~ and ye be even more beautiful with that wart gone from your nose! But beware, thick, black bristly hairs will now replace it!

Lock your doors and windows! ~ and carry a cross with you at all times!


Linda

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25 posted 2009-07-23 12:29 PM


Yann the Man ~

A warm "hello" to you, my Frenchie friend! I appreciate your warm response!

Warm hug,
Linda

Earth Angel
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26 posted 2009-07-23 12:34 PM


kudanesh ~

Glad you like poems that rhyme.
'Cause I write them all the time!

Poor example, eh? lol

Thank you for your "brilliant" response! lol


EA

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27 posted 2009-07-23 12:38 PM


LindsayP ~

Oh, I scared the crone off when I huffed and I puffed and blew her away! I may be small, but I'm mighty! lol

btw, if any crone hits on you, I'll protect you!

Love you 2,

Linda Lou

Earth Angel
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28 posted 2009-07-23 12:42 PM


Oklahoma's Finest Rose ~

I'm glad she disappeared, as well! Lord knows what I would have done to her if she came any nearer! lol Light has might over the Dark of night! (at least I hope so! ) lol

Love you, Sweet Sue,
Linda

OwlSA
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29 posted 2009-07-23 01:45 PM


Contrary to others, this nasty old owl isn't glad the crone disappeared.  I was revelling in the mood and the narrative - and then phooof!  the crone was gone!  However, I am glad he was there otherwise this exciting poem that had me spellbound all the way through wouldn't have been there.  The picture is picture perfect for the poem, too!  

Owl

Bill Charles
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30 posted 2009-07-23 03:41 PM


Linda - aaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiieeeeeeeeeeeee, holy smokes, chills and goose bumps have I. Come on feet, faster, faster...

BC

Klassy Lassy
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31 posted 2009-07-23 04:12 PM


I knew I wouldn't keep the disquise long...


Klassy Lassy
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32 posted 2009-07-23 04:16 PM


Well, Drat! Me Pretty, that was a hair-raising experience!     I won't complain if it should sprout on my noggin', however.  
Earth Angel
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33 posted 2009-07-24 10:53 AM


Wise OWL ~

I'm glad you got into the spirit of the write. Actually, I could have gone on and developed the story more. It as if the crone was there one moment and gone the next. She could have all all sorts of unspeakable, ghouly things before her sudden exit! hehehe

BOO!

Love & a hug and a bubble of protective Light (not the bubble, bubble, toil, and trouble kind of bubble! lol)

Loveya!
Linda

Earth Angel
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34 posted 2009-07-24 10:56 AM


BC ~

When I'm filled with fright, I want my feet to take flight. But, alas, they get frozen to the ground. ~ And if there is any movement at all, it is like running on the spot with no forward momentum! Actually, it looks rather comical to those who have witnessed that!

May you be fleet of foot!


Linda

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35 posted 2009-07-24 10:59 AM


Klassy One ~

Even if you do sprout some black, bristly hairs on your comely face, you'll still be a Klassy Lassie!


EA

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