Days and nights with haikus

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Open Poetry #45

Days and nights with haikus

poddarku
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since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2009-07-07 10:00 AM

Days and nights and the universe
I
The musty monsoon
insects with swelled bellies
soggy paper boats.
II
Curiosity
a black feathered bird peeps in,
there is no return.
III
Close the eyes, its night.
A bat has taken a bite;
the fruit rolls away.
IV
The desolate rails.
Millions of butterflies,
they reign the wild shrubs.
V
Crystallized water,
this rock has witnessed years,
a fly has more eyes.
© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2009-07-07 11:15 AM

hello Poddarku, this poem is sweet when we don't hurry and weigh the words and the images, succession of haikus cristalize thoughts and give to the reader a transparent serenity...Thanks for sharing.

yann

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

2 posted 2009-07-07 11:31 AM

quote:
The desolate rails.
Millions of butterflies,
they reign the wild shrubs.

I love this one best, but all are very good of course. Wow, is there a place where there are so many butterflies (like in "One hundred years of solitude" by G. Marquez?).

This morning while driving I was mentally writing a haiku containing butterflies ...
will see if I remember it!

Beautiful, dear Kushal!

Love,
Margherita

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I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2009-07-07 12:50 PM

Magnificent, Kushal. Echoing Yann and Margherita's responses, except that I am not sure which is my favourite. It seems to keep on being the one that I am reading at the time.

Owl

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2009-07-07 01:02 PM

Hi! Ku!

These are fantastic! My personal favs are #1 and #4. The first one because I could really feel the damp, cloying heat and with the fourth one I could vividly envision it. As a girl, I used to walk abandoned railway tracks and I remember all the butterflies that flitted about them.

They all were great!!!

Love 'n a hug,
Linda

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