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Have A Crappy Christmas

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madelyn
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0 posted 12-17-2009 09:09 PM       View Profile for madelyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for madelyn


Presents are laid out under the trees
I watch the other kids laugh with glee
While I sit in my room head between knees

I hate Chirstmas; and no I'm not the grinch
People say Merry Christmas and I just flinch

Ever since 2006
Iíve never been able to get the Christmas fix

Santa isnít jolly
So why decorate with holly?

Santa is a creep
At night he breaks and enters
When in the house thereís not a peep

Kids laugh, parents snicker
While I cry as the candle flickers
Parents buy kids Christmas stickers

I donít see the point
Discussions are not joint
At Christmas

I hate Christmas
The crappiest time of year
Except of course from my birthday
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1 posted 12-18-2009 01:15 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Bah-Humbug!  
People just have to go with the flow,
Enjoy the holidays, candles that glow.
Laughing with family and friends is joy,
Opening presents, ho-ho, oh boy!

Let the cheer in your heart and try to smile,
Christmas season is only for a little while.

Well done, and it sure sounded very "Grinch-like"

            
Happy Holidays
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2 posted 12-18-2009 07:08 PM       View Profile for Ravagence   Email Ravagence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravagence

@Mysteria
Agreed that it sounds grinch like

@Madelyn

You are good at keeping your reader reading, but at the end of the poem you never tell what 2006 was all about. You leave the reading thinking; "Was 2006 just the date she "grew" out of Christmas at?" or "What's the point? To be negative about Christmas?"

I myself was thinking; "Go get a blog and post all about how Christmas sucks, More people'll pay attention to that."

Well written, just not the best poem I've seen.
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