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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Tell me! Let those words Dive From your trembling tongue, And I'll give you an 8 Just for trying, Or, Yell Cannon ball! Then I'll give you a 10 As water drips down My cheek to my chin. Tell me! Spit out that mucus At once! Or would you rather choke? Will you let it Build up in your throat, As you swim away? Well, When you drown, Will you tell me then? The tips of my fingers Start to bleed the thoughts That overwhelm me [This message has been edited by freeand2sexy (05-24-2009 10:13 PM).] |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Hmm.. If it weren't for the fact that I'm hyper, I might say this poem is rubbish and absolutely crazy.  Just kidding. I love it actually. -Zach |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Thanks Zach, this poem is a bit different, I guess. |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
Love this poem If you don't like something, |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Thank you!!! The tips of my fingers |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
I really enjoyed reading this, which is a surpise as i'm not so keen on non-rhyming poetry. This was rather intriguing. Good stuff. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Thanks, Octave, I never really liked non-rhyming poems, either. I'm just trying figure out how to write a good free verse. The tips of my fingers |
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