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Reborn_Phoenix
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The drum continues to beat down upon my head,
but then I burst into several shards of glass.
The floor is now a mirror that only reflects
one same face covered by several sets of masks.

Now each one of the masks glares right at me,
as if condemning the lie that had created them.
I then shatter the guilt with a stomp of my heel,
causing the masks to shriek and take a new form.

Fire erupts where the shards of glass once laid,
and a white shroud arises to blind my sight.
In the smoke I see a figure slowly approaching,
and as it comes closer the heat consumes me.

Finally the guilt disappears, but so do I.

[This message has been edited by Reborn_Phoenix (03-04-2009 02:35 AM).]

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1 posted 03-04-2009 12:13 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

wow.

welcome to pip

this is a fantastic write, what a great first post!

Really like the reference to the masks...

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2 posted 03-04-2009 06:43 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Wow. I agree. Very good first post!
Love your imagery in this.
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Reborn_Phoenix
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3 posted 03-04-2009 07:59 PM       View Profile for Reborn_Phoenix   Email Reborn_Phoenix   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Reborn_Phoenix

Thank you both for the welcome, and for the comments on my poem.

And thank you SEA for the greeting card as well. The design fits the poem perfectly.
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4 posted 03-06-2009 08:50 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Nice imagery. I enjoyed this.
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5 posted 03-06-2009 08:37 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

I absolutely love this, and the imagery is amazing as well.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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