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Open Poetry #43

I Just Need You

thegreatsicknasty
Junior Member

since 2008-08-31

Posts 11

0 posted 2008-09-02 08:22 PM

This poem is a classic love poem that i wrote just last night in about 45 minutes. so ill use the time as an excuse if its poor. its actually how i feel about someone so are the others ive written.

I want to be there.
I want to be there with you.
Next to you.
I want to lay there with you.
See only you and think only you.

Lay on your chest and listen to you breathing.
Listen to your heart beating the back round.
Beating letting me know the seconds I'm still with you.

I want to feel the scent of you trinkle through my nose and into my mind.
I want to taste you on my lips.
Feel your smooth skin on the edge of my fingers.
Have my hand brush back the hair that masks your face.
I want to see you.
And only you.
Amaze and astound my vision with your smile and your grace.
I want to feel you in my soul.
Feel you breathing.
Feel you move, feel you looking back at me.
I want to hear you talk to me.
Say Anything at all.
Just want to hear you.
Hear you burn through my ears and into my soul.
I just need you.
Near and forever.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-09-02 09:14 PM

Yo TGSN,

The good thought is definatly there. You might think of combining some of the sentences, and working them into strophes.

Bobby

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