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Resonance Of War
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Resonance Of War |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Resonance Of War Sing me a song of a lad that is gone Tell me of his mother’s woe Croon his last words said on far battle field Spoken to only his foe Utter a glimpse into what things were like When bullets were falling around Covey just a fraction of feelings you felt The day he was sunk in the ground Hum out the trumpets cold sorrowful wail Sounding out taps for this lad Then tell me how I can go on when the war Took the only child I had I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Tremendous resonance, dear Ruth! A tragedy that touches so many, it's almost unbearable. Your write is powerful and touches the heart. Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HootieGal~ Such a stirring write~ It paused me in a moment of reflection and thankfulness~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Ocean Vuong Junior Member
since 2008-03-29
Posts 37NYC |
Powerful theme, one suggestion with rhyming. Rhyming is a meticulous act which requires precise rhyme scheme and sometimes iambic pentameter to be successful, though most of contemporary poetry has strayed away from rhyme, the literary world now focus more on the technical talent of rhyming poems since it tends to bind and even suffocate the piece with its diction restraints. Try attempting this piece without the need for rhyme, perhaps you will find more added depth to it. good luck! -ocean |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Ruth, I'm sorry to hear that. God bless you and yours. Bobby |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
Sad. wonderful poem. Always love the read. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ruth.. I love your work.. your poetry is a joy to read.. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
This is so beautiful. I am in tears… If this incredible poem is your truth, I am so very sorry for your loss of your child… If it is not, then you have a truly compassionate and comprehending soul because you have written, so beautifully, what a mother lost seeks to know… Tammy<333 |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very touching piece, Ruth. It would break the heart of any mother. Ida |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dear friends, Thank you for the comments. As many of my poems, this is not based on my experiences but rather on the experiences of others. I have a friend who lost her son over in Iraq and this poem was based on that. I'm so honored to blessed with the ability to come across otherwise but don't wish to mislead anyone here. Thanks  Ruth |
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