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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2007-09-30 01:50 PM

There is this feeling left
   a sort of emptiness

when your words are not heard

    Silence now beckons to me

come sit in this solitude
and quiet of moment.....

I can feel you there,
but also here
held in hush
of serene breeze.

     Sometimes this silence deafens me

just one word.....

   and a longing felt
to hear the song
in your voice
and look into the softness
of eyes that see
      the all of me

tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility

that would replace this stale air
    that I now inhale....

captured within your gaze
revived in the beauty of your spirit
warmed from your light

and in your kiss
    finding the first breath
             of new life that I breathe...

{revised 9-30-07}

"In yearning for nothing, you will be free to enjoy what you do, free to see the patterns, free to hear the music in all things."
-Barbara Ann Kipfer

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2007-09-30 02:41 PM

Nice, Donna you write such beauty. Thanx
for letting us have a piece of it.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2007-09-30 02:43 PM

of eyes that see
the all of me

**************************
o such eyes
if such to fall upon
my own browns
would be heavenly
to behold right now
********************************
lovely words of yours for my own response to bring to you
gentlespirit

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

3 posted 2007-09-30 02:55 PM

just a word, yes, that lets you know they are there, that they care. I feel this

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2007-10-01 06:05 AM

Barry, Thank you sweetie.

Mish, always you leave me such beautiful thoughts in verse. Thanks hon.

Dennis, thank you very much.

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

5 posted 2007-10-01 08:55 PM

.

GS,

You wear your heart
on a tattered sleeve,

John

.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

6 posted 2007-10-01 09:52 PM

fine emotive/romantic 'write'!

Applause!!

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2007-10-02 03:16 AM

and a longing felt
"to hear the song
in your voice
and look into the softness
of eyes that see
the all of me"

~ Your longing is felt!

Thank you for "tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility"

May the air that you breathe be like the first breath of spring.

Hug with love,

Linda

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2007-10-02 06:18 AM

Wonderful...James

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2007-10-02 06:20 AM

ms gs, when you do love songs
you wear them lovely..enjoyed it ms

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

10 posted 2007-10-02 07:02 AM

tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility

that would replace this stale air
that I now inhale....

loved your words~~

M

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2007-10-03 11:28 AM

good read

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

12 posted 2007-10-03 01:47 PM

Written with powerful longing and melancholy. I loved it . . . felt it!

Robert

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