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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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0 posted 2007-09-21 08:40 PM



The laugh that dipped
Its words under the pens smirk.

With the raft of the wind,
The shiver of his fingers,
The switch of ease that
Rode his levered shoulders

He watched it strum,
As he walked, she wrote,
The footsteps got long
With each wooden row
That skinned his tears.

© Copyright 2007 Tomer Fried - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-09-22 12:47 PM


nice

poem


ARCTIC WIND

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
2 posted 2007-09-24 05:59 PM


Enjoyed this talented rendering
PoppaLoco
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since 2007-09-23
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3 posted 2007-09-24 06:30 PM


I feel silly, I wish I could understand it deeper. Maybe it's because I'm sleepy, but your words reek of greatness and a deeper meaning that is beyond me. I wish I was a native speaker..

Keep writing so beautifully, I'll get it too one day =)

Pops

Tomer
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4 posted 2007-09-25 01:15 PM



Happy you enjoyed everyone.  Pops, I appreciate your compliment.  Ha, I wish it was deeper than it was, thanks again.

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