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Drauntz
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0 posted 2007-07-14 02:26 PM


The sky is so blue
like your eyes
the Sun is so bright
like your smiles
ah, my love,
like a bird flying so high
May your heart is again prepared
when she comes back.

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2007-07-14 05:13 PM


Lovely...all over the world hearts are being prepared...James
Dominique-Simone
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2 posted 2007-07-14 06:39 PM


Touching and sweet
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Member Rara Avis
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3 posted 2007-07-14 10:48 PM


lovely words....

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

aziza
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4 posted 2007-07-15 12:19 PM


Beautiful, Drauntz - just beautiful.

A

HopeS
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5 posted 2007-07-15 12:58 PM


Caring words to brighten the day , smiles across the miles


Hope

Rick
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6 posted 2007-07-15 07:38 AM


Wonderful words my friend, much enjoyed.

Rick

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2007-07-15 07:54 AM


One I can relate to.

Nicely done~~
M

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2007-07-15 08:41 PM


Drauntz,

You can believe that I'm smiling all over this one...




The Lady
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9 posted 2007-07-17 01:34 PM




beautifully done!

BBGrrl
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10 posted 2007-07-17 01:42 PM


A simple and sweet thought, but I don't understand this line

"May your heart is again prepared"

Could it be written a touch differently?  It seems to be missing a word or two.

Drauntz
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11 posted 2007-07-17 01:58 PM


Dear BBGrrl,

this was the very first poem for the new sheet #41 and I wanted it to be cheerful because #40 was closed when there was a fighting.

Who can stop love? nobody. Only we prepare our once, twice hurt hearts to accept love again.
I wrote it on the site. May lost some logic..
you may ask anything again.  suggestions are welcomed with heart.

[This message has been edited by Drauntz (07-17-2007 02:45 PM).]

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