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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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Dreaming! [Rictameter] Dreaming, my mind adrift (with all things wild and fair) as sea winds sweeping silent slopes, paint sunset softly on the hills of time where love and youth have wandered far mid memory-meadows murmuring mists, Dreaming [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-16-2007 07:59 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And I like line three, especially! Well done! |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Secondhanddreampoet, This works very well. The form is well handled. Bobby |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a beauty. I enjoyed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
secondhanddreampoet Well done, enjoyed. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Thanks everyone for your comments pursuant to this 'write'! I hope lots of fine folks will take up my 'Second-Hand' dreamer's: ['Rictameter'] dream challenge!? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"paint sunset softly on the hills of time" Gorgeous! And for the challenge: /pip/Forum103/HTML/002130.html |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
oh yes poet! dream on... |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
I loved the flow of this, it is a wonderful poem to read. really liked this. |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
This is beautiful. Dreaming wild and fair, oh - very fine! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Although the two (alleged) 'poetry form and analysis' websites I consulted showed several (alleged) 'award winning' Rictameters beginning with first lines like: "I thought" and "Love sings", etc.; I have been told the beginning and ending lines have to be 1 word (2 syllables); ergo, perhaps this should have been: Dreaming! [Rictameter] Dreaming, my mind adrift (with all things wild and fair) as sea winds sweeping silent slopes, paint sunset softly on the hills of time where love and youth have wandered far mid memory-meadows murmuring mists, Dreaming |
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