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ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2007-04-06 12:19 PM


Ever leave the big city
wander beyond sodium lights
boulevards
into green space
then gaze upward
all the way up

Clear night sky
is pearly speckled
familiar stars twinkle
'my conscience
can't die with me'
echos in the night wind,
once our last breaths
are taken.

Ever lie down in a park
group of friends
all heads touching
into blue space
look way up

Clouds appear from wisps
billow in the wind
like perfect sails
shaped like a horse's head
shaped like a family car
far from reality

Clear day
in deep shades of blue
familar winds hear
your conscious thought
wondering
all heads touching
awe inspired
sense of self departs?
makes no sense
the all about
a 'here today
and gone tomorrow'
the wind answers..
one wonders where.



© Copyright 2007 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
1 posted 2007-04-06 12:44 PM


beautiful. reminded me of  some unforgetable period of my childhood.  
much enjoyed.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2007-04-06 01:34 PM


quote:
Clear night sky
is pearly speckled
familiar stars twinkle
'my conscience
can't die with me'
echos in the night wind,
once our last breaths
are taken.



Yes, awe!

Absolutely beautiful! And I am positive that we shall be conscious.

Love,
Margherita

wordwizard
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since 2003-09-08
Posts 483
on the way to next world
3 posted 2007-04-06 06:19 PM


Inspired by thoughts on the afterlife..thanks for reading


passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2007-04-07 08:24 AM


awe indeed

glad I didn't miss this one

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
5 posted 2007-04-07 08:56 AM


awe inspired
sense of self departs..

we must be on the same thought path today~~

M

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
6 posted 2007-04-08 10:45 AM


way da go! I guess if I keep my content clear and loose I'll get more comments..or maybe it was the title that got you all to click in...anyway thanks


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