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Open Poetry #40

Incoherant Ramblings Trio

Thebaer
Junior Member

since 2007-03-18

Posts 10

0 posted 2007-03-19 06:51 PM

Nothing seemed so peculiar
Until I opened my eyes
Things came truer
Thoughts became skies
But chaos seemed to linger
Filtering through the swell
Attacking all the singers
Before “it” we fell

I am more than an emotion
But I hide behind the lies
Only going through the motions
Yet I’ve realized
That singing isn’t forever
We must speak unto the sky
And that life is an endeavor
At which we can only try

Why must I hold a pattern?
To everything I do
Everything must have its turn
And to all, its time is due
All words I write seem understated
I try so hard to be deep
But it all ends in me frustrated

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2007-03-19 11:55 PM

This is great. The one comment I would make,is that the ending was abrupt...such a wonderful flow throughout the entire piece...one line and one rhyme short.

I sure appreciated every time I read it!
TD

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