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steavenr
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0 posted 2007-02-09 11:39 PM



where elm meets oak two lovers came
with hearts entwined as minstrels sing
sculpting love-art on windows dim
moon lit from darkened day’s delight

lanterns glowing, hearts afire
village rests, hearts aspire

as day lights shadows pass from flame
to ash and nighttime shades do spring
he turns to her, she studies him
and hand in hand they stroll into the night

and loose their souls from routine’s mire
and sear their souls in passion’s fire

as hand in hand they clasp that self-same moment in time

© Copyright 2007 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2007-02-10 12:00 PM


you are really fantastic at this rhyme scheme

I'm in awe

steavenr
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2 posted 2007-02-10 12:11 PM


thank you dixie, but I must admit that you and ThisDiamond are responsible for my use of it.  I was inspired by her desire to see more of it, and by your calling attention to it.  I used it three times now, so I suppose that I could call it a trilogy (smiles), and leave it behind for now...
Earth Angel
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3 posted 2007-02-10 06:00 AM


That wondrous moment in time had me all aglow as I savoured the romantic warmth of this beautifully scribes poem of love.

To love and being loved in return!

Linda

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2007-02-10 10:26 AM


Steaven,
I don't think you will ever leave this behind...it will blend into all your perfect meter in the future.  You have lovely vision.
TD

passing shadows
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5 posted 2007-02-11 09:14 AM


well I really hope to see you using it more but just in case you don't...I'm putting these in my personal library here

I truly admire the form and might have a hand at it once myself, sooner or later

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