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Teen Poetry #8

Save me

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2006-12-28 09:20 PM

Everytime I look at you
My Heart stops

Everytime I hear you voice,
My breath catches in my throat

Everytime our eyes meet,
I wanna fall,
Just hoping that you'll catch me

Everytime you say you love me,
I'm in heaven

Then I wake up...

And I'm back in hell

Cause I'm without you
And you'll never say you love me

Because I don't have a chance

I L-...don't...L-...love you.

I'm crying.

And you won't save me

damo451
Junior Member

since 2006-12-29

Posts 18
Western Australia

1 posted 2006-12-29 11:51 PM

I love this. Relates to me completely. Also a very flowing poem. Going in my personal library

~Damo~

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

2 posted 2006-12-30 12:36 PM

I wasn't crazy about the whole poem until I read the very last line:

And you won't save me

Maybe it's just because I can relate so much, but no matter what the whole first part of the poem was didn't matter cause that last line was amazing. lol I'm not sure if that makes any sense, I'm sorry.

-Erin

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

3 posted 2007-01-03 09:05 PM

thanks guys! ya'll rock!

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