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Sad_eyed_girl
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since 2007-06-04
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0 posted 2007-06-23 11:52 PM



I sit here
with my expressionless face.
Im surronded by those
who mean the most to me.
But I dont feel a thing.
Im not even happy.
At home in my bed,
I cry endlessly, for no appearent reason
maybe its something deep inside.
maybe the feelings I hide
now there shouting out a cry
HERE I AM STOP SHUTING ME OUT!!!
for now ill ignore them
pretend there not there.
I'll fall asleep crying
and pretend I dont care
I'll wake in the morning,
get dressed for school.
I'll meet with my friends
and pretend it's all kool

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Alaina
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since 2007-06-16
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1 posted 2007-06-23 11:58 PM


this basically explains the exact mood i had last night. great write. welcome and i hope to see more of your stuff
Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2007-06-24 12:43 PM


yes. this was truely awesome. good work.
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3 posted 2007-06-24 12:47 PM


Welcome to Pip! What a sad heartfelt first post I look forward to reading more from you. *Please check your email for a special greeting!
surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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Canada
4 posted 2007-06-26 06:55 PM


it was a fairly good poem but it didn't seem to fully flow all the way through
Gifted
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since 2007-06-26
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Caribbean
5 posted 2007-06-26 09:10 PM


Yeah I know how you feel, but I can tell you from experience that hiding and ignoring those feelings wont help.
Jezzika
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since 2005-01-05
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work
6 posted 2007-06-28 02:37 PM


This was really good...
I often feel that way and it makes me crazy!!!
Loved it!!!

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