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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2009-02-17 09:42 AM




The Key

In trust I was given a key,
My love said “Please, keep this for me,
For it fits only my heart,
It promises us our start.”
On a chain lies the golden key.

On a chain lies the golden key,
I wear it next near my heart,
Though we may still be apart
This touch of key thrills me
As it warms the beat of my heart.

For this key was given in trust,
By a love that is good and just,
For he loves only me
It’s carved within this key,
Though alone my feet step through the dust.

A promise was made from his eyes
A future we’ll someday realize,
For I am held to his key
As true his heart is within me
We’ll someday have reason for sighs.

He went off to do as he would
For his honor is true, and is good,
A chain holds this, his key
Tis his promise, you see…
Thus, in trust, was I given his key.






Slightly revised
Circa 2003
(c) KRJ



© Copyright 2009 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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1 posted 2009-02-17 01:27 PM


Enchanting and intriguing, Karilea.  I love it.

Owl

turtle
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2 posted 2009-02-17 04:55 PM


Hi sunny

Not familiar with this form, but I like the metaphor


Oklahoma Rose
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3 posted 2009-02-17 10:04 PM


I really like this, Karilea.
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4 posted 2009-02-20 03:05 PM


For this key was given in trust,
By a love that is good and just,
For he loves only me
It’s carved within this key,
Though alone my feet step through the dust.

To have such a love... or even the promise of such a love... is to have the gift of a lifetime. *S* Beautiful work!

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2009-02-23 06:09 AM


Beautiful poem of loyalty and love.
You have a way of making things that touch everyone's life so meaningful.
But, then, that's what makes you a poet.

Take care

Eric

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2009-02-23 06:36 AM


"A promise was made from his eyes"

the eyes  say it all...  love this, Karilea



M

Margherita
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7 posted 2009-02-23 09:02 AM


Oh, this romantic feel that trickles from your beautiful words, dear Karilea, holds me captivated.

Love,
Margherita


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