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You Can Take Anything You Want From Me
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You Can Take Anything You Want From Me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Your honesty was the take on the matter the things that strike of villainy remain a brief novella in your history the church got all of your mother's body and her money leaving you broke with nothing left but passion the passion you brought to me refined out of forgiveness the same passion you would share with me in a world of lost art the art of true passion distinguished from all reason making my mysterious search for wholesome love, complete........ the first time I looked at your glowing freckled face I thought the freckles would be rough to the touch but you were so fresh and farm girl beautiful that I just had to try, had to somehow steal a stroke, a brush against your skin and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily and then our first kiss your lips were moist and full felt like they had been softened by a Godly sent sweet misty spring rain as you gave yourself to me without any apprehension My insides pushed my heart into my throat the magic that sometimes falls out of heaven captured us for the duration it was then I realized passion without love was against the rules of conscience oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, That's the spirit buddy, that's what I like to see. This is very good writing. Bobby |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Bobby you know I always appreciate it when you drop in and share your thoughts. Eric |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"but you were so fresh and farm girl beautiful that I just had to try, had to somehow steal a stroke, a brush against your skin and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily and then..." so romantic E,  Thanks again, M |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A love as sweet as this, of which you have so tenderly and adoringly 'spoken', is a love which would undoubtedly be forever imprinted upon the minds, hearts, and souls of you both.  True-ly beautiful, Eric, Linda  |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Beautiful, and beautifully written. Mark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Maureen. Always love your visits. Thanks James for dropping in and reading this. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Linda and Marc I thank you both for the beautiful words and the kind comments. Take care Eric |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Eric, You tell a beautiful and poetic story. I like this lots. A |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"passion without love was against the rules of conscience" ...I like this...had something else chosen to comment on before I saw this...it is all good...words like these speak volumes of truth...obviously personal, thank you for seeing fit to share this...enjoyed |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Loving feelings beautifully expressed straight from the heart Hope |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Alison I appreciate the comment and the visit. Steaven Glad you like that line as it was one of my favourites too when I was writing this. Appreciate the comments and the visit. Eric |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
This is so sweet and loving...enjoyed! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Hope for the kind comment and for visiting. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Amusemi glad you could drop in and thanks for the kind words. Eric |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
"it was then I realized passion without love was against the rules of conscience oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright" Dear Eric, you sliced a piece of your heart off with this one. "you can take anything you want from me" I know this feeling well. Richy  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - you are a true romantic, and this writing proves it. What a soft touch and read, gentle, heartfelt, passionate... BC |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
romanticcccccccccccccc |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Eric, outstanding work! Each line swells gingerly with heart paint. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Richy I surely do appreciate the part you quoted as being one of your favorite parts. I enjoyed writing this and appreciate your kind words and positive input. Thanks Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bill and Yann thank you so much for the visit and the read. I do appreciate the kind words so much. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Threadbare I like that phrase heart paint and I appreciate your kind comments. Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So many beautiful, romantic lines to enjoy. Your heart sings profoundly harmonious tunes here, dear Eric. Love, Margherita |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
ethome, much goodness in your poem...seems a good man has found a good woman...take care. |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
Beautiful,great feelings, expressed in a beautifuly great way .... so romantic good luck & T.C |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Margherita & r v I appreciate the read and the kind comments. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sarah I appreciate the kind words so very much thanks for dropping in. Eric |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Eric.. I love every word of this beautiful poem... wonderful! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much RDB I appreciate the visit and the appreciation. take care Eric |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
As always sweet poet man...lovely beyond words |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Paula, long time no read. Thanks so much for those words beyonds words I really appreciate the comment. Eric |
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