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Forlorn Beauty
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Forlorn Beauty |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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She wrote of things long gone, things that linger in her memory. The scent of love, the sound of joy, the piercing of loss. Memories that present themselves from the corner of her mind at times when everything else is still. Sometimes it hurts her to the point of sobbing behind the closed door of a bathroom. Where the world is locked out, if only for a moment. Rinsing every trace of tears from her face, she erases all indications that life wasn’t what she presented to the outside. Always a painted smile, a perfect lilt, she was the supreme actress upon her stage. I watch her sometimes wondering if she will ever stop pretending and fly to what it is that keeps her heart, or if that is an impossibility and the reason she writes more than she lives. Leaving me to weep at the beauty of loss so deep that it seeps into and upon everything she touches in a way that can never be explained. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Rinsing every trace of tears from her face, she erases all indications that life wasn’t what she presented to the outside. Always a painted smile, a perfect lilt, she was the supreme actress upon her stage. I watch her sometimes wondering if she will ever stop pretending and fly to what it is that keeps her heart, or if that is an impossibility and the reason she writes more than she lives Oh, Susan, you have a way of bringing unexpected tears to my eyes whenever I read you poetry. But...that's a good thing! hugs, Chris |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"...she writes more than she lives" Sad. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
The line that caught ice caught me: "she writes more than she lives" I don't think you know how much I can relate to that. You are truly gifted with words. Something good to live for with writing abilities like that. Cheers - Ed |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan....this is such a compassionate write. Sounds like someone I know. Good job.  |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
A beautiful sadness clearly expressed. PLEASE VISIT MY REGULARLY UPDATED WEB SITE http://www.anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Very stong, well written verse. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ah, Sus, two heartbeats are heard loudly in this: one sad and forlorn, seemingly self-doomed to sorrow, and one warmed by an overflow of understanding, compassion. |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
"Leaving me to weep at the beauty of loss so deep that it seeps into and upon everything she touches" Oh, My, Beautiful! Will |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"she writes more than she lives" Oh, the sorrow felt here. Beautiful work Susan. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you everyone.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Sad and beautiful Susan, you captured the Forlorn beauty quite well. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such a beauty! Heartfelt sweet words!! One of your best, well in my opinion. JL |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, yes, a most enjoyable read. Perhaps the forlorn beauty you speak of has found her life in writing and I would hope that it brings a measure of satisfaction to her. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the sorrow of the beautiful one the beauty of the sadness you wove magic here |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very strong and powerful.....there is beauty in everything, even sadness and pain. After I read this, I thought of Emily Dickinson--how she hid herself away from the world, and yet captured such truths of life. Well done!  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Susan, you've a compassionate heart! It takes so much to look away from the rubble where life once grew, but only stones and jagged edges remain. What strength it must take for her to leave no trace upon her face. My eyes sting just reading this! Beautifully penned! ~ Klassy |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Susan Caldwell, I suppose very common and so very heart wrenching is this 'forlorn beauty' that you describe so very well here through your poetry. Your poem was very well written. -Bob |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all. The "she" is different people (man or woman) in one.... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
"She" is no less real, for being a composite of several people. My admiration and understanding for the forlorn beauty, and my gratitude to you for your compassionate caring. - Owl |
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ChaoticHazeLight Member
since 2006-06-13
Posts 71California, U.S. |
I hate the thought of someone having to hide behind fake smiles. This is full of pain, but also full of truth. Sometimes I guess it's easier to hide though. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Memories that present themselves from the corner of her mind at times when everything else is still. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That is such a beautiful verse!! I think we've all been to that corner when everything is still....all by ourselves. Such a pretty, sad song, Susan~ You did really good~ |
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