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Of Grave Concern
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Of Grave Concern |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Your corrections are gifts to me. Of Grave Concern In darkened deepness mid sleep's dreaming mold, I wandered through the cladded mystic night And found old tombstones by way of starlight, With stones shaped like scrolls and books edged with gold. These ancient scribbling sages stiffly hold In chains scholastic gnomes with ghostly might, Embalmed with tenured rites. This haunting site Enshrined by erudites' kin and their fold! Still mesmerized by the grim reaper's taunt And freight, I saw ones bringing books "highbred" To graves and pointed to each book they brought. They swore, "By these books we've taught all you said As truth!"An inner voice spoke in my thought, "These living dead ... 'beheaded' by the dead!" [This message has been edited by BROTHER JOHN (05-21-2006 08:21 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
quite interesting this tale...would be appropriate to keep around for a dark and stormy night, huh? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
lol I had a funny take on this remembering a professor in college he was furious with my interpretations of Po chu I and Basho he was the dead teaching a roomful of dead listeners who shook their heads in agreement until one day I challenged the God's interpretations and the other students said mine made more sense...felt 'true' anyway, just another memory triggered by a thoughtful write thanks BTW, check your spelling/typos. You've indicated NO to critiques in your bio yet at the top of this page, I think you've indicated otherwise. enshrined |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
You speak of love Dave |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"These living dead ... 'beheaded' by the dead!" ~ powerful closing that literally gave me the goosebumples!  EA |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Magnus, Thank you for taking the time to read this. This poem was not written as a love poem. It was and is meant to show the folly of following dead or living dead authorities who seek to "deaden" the living. I have ten years of higher education and have been under some of these dead teachers who were embalmed by other dead teachers and their agenda was (is) to make carbon copy disciples. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Midnitesun, Thank you for your comments. You picked up very quickly the point of the writing. I guess it is a satire on some of the teachers I had in higher education. They claimed to be liberal in their philosphy, yet their bottom line was: "you throw up what I throw out!" lol I did not realize this no was (is) on my bio. I tried to get it off and cannot. Can anyone help me here!? |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Bodger, Love is the bottom line. For some teachers, the bottom line is: you believe as I do or else! BJ |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Earth Angel, The setting for this is morbid. Yet I had to set it this way to get to the "cutting edge." I have over ten years of higher education and this writing was based on experience. Some of my teachers breathed life in their teaching and they were a delight. Yet I had some who were dead because their teachers were dead. Thank goodness, I was not "beheaded" by them. Thanks for your aliveness in your writing for you are creating more life. This is the reason why so many read your works. Blessings on you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Brother John go to Members Area, then into your Profile to edit near the bottom of the page it allows you a yes/no option for critiques I appreciated your reply tomy comments. Thanks! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Brother, your education is as impressive as your writing! ~ and I thank you for your kind and generous words. Blessings to you, as well ~ and to your sister. She is still in my prayers. Love & Light, EA  |
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