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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2006-02-26 01:36 PM

Counter Fit

All that was level at one time
which ran the eye of beam
and held close treasures, gathered
across a dreamscape’s seem
all that was balanced, level, and true
somehow slipped in thunderous quick
then quaked in these losses

true,

all was held in books that bleed
beyond some land of fantasies
for somewhere in the eye of seed
where sometime dwells reality
we crossed against the gist of time
stepped through a chasm mirrored
where ships sail skies
and alligators cry
where elephants forget
and rabbits wear fine hats
it is there I’ll find the man who sat

as like a dreamer [me]
strumming to some tune in mist
[the mist sees we]
like some Johnny Appleseed
oh, trust was great, for theirs was need
no counterfeit in truth
you see.

But now the counter of some fit
lay in dust come ruin,
and while the sun in southern sky
seeks it way towards noon
the ache in kind
[no one’s so blind]
still tries to find
some way to right
some way to light
that in the unbalance of this feel
some way to level
the eye of beam
to hold close treasures, gathered
across a dreamscape’s seem.

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

1 posted 2006-02-26 02:48 PM

''Where elephants forget''..my favourite line here Kariliea...enjoyed your reead..thank you..

Goldenrose.

Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2006-02-26 02:55 PM

just

SIL......jo

Bodger
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since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

3 posted 2006-02-26 05:41 PM

My worry for you Sunshine is that the pressure is now on you to write and to maintain everything else

Your words I always look forward to, but for me at least, take care

Dave

shades of paul
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since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

4 posted 2006-02-26 06:17 PM

"Strumming to some tune in mist" Love It....paul ( a guitar player)

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-02-26 10:42 PM

"stepped through a chasm mirrored
where ships sail skies
and alligators cry
where elephants forget
and rabbits wear fine hats"

It's... it's ... magic Sunshine.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2006-02-26 10:46 PM

"we crossed against the gist of time
stepped through a chasm mirrored
where ships sail skies
and alligators cry
where elephants forget
and rabbits wear fine hats
it is there I’ll find the man who sat

as like a dreamer [me]
strumming to some tune in mist
[the mist sees we]
like some Johnny Appleseed
oh, trust was great, for theirs was need
no counterfeit in truth
you see."

Yes, I see!

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2006-02-28 04:13 AM

....across a dreamscape's seem....

Oh yes...oh so very yes. With this poem in me, I think I'm ready for the rest of the night.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2006-02-28 06:54 AM

some way to light
that in the unbalance of this feel

I understand this (to my surprise)and know the "missing" you feel.

M

StevenS
Senior Member

since 2005-09-21

Posts 945
L. A. (Lower Alabama)

9 posted 2006-02-28 07:57 AM

Love this Sunshine, Made me feel like a kid skipping along through a field of daisys.
:-)

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

10 posted 2006-02-28 09:02 AM

"we crossed against the gist of time
stepped through a chasm mirrored
where ships sail skies
and alligators cry
where elephants forget
and rabbits wear fine hats"

Magic...pure magic!

Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2006-02-28 11:08 AM

Sunshine,
Wisdom comes in packages large and small.
But few show in the waul. Excellent write.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

12 posted 2006-02-28 01:20 PM

Superb! Clever word play, intricate detail and then stunning crescendo with the dramatic rhyme and image effects right up to the 2-line climax at the end, reflecting the beginning calm! Wow, wow and wowweeeee!

- Owl

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