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Mute and Alone.
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Mute and Alone. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Your tears are too salty for me to kiss them all away. Your muscles, too jumbled like chaotic branches, I cannot always untie the knots... people love you, you make them laugh You are so silent, even now that you can finally speak, I will listen, but if you try to justify your violent addiction, your twisted tongue, I must have an explanation... you leave me wanting... Here I sit, living backwards and accepting it.. I want you to take your hand in mine and say you were merely checking my pulse.. For we are stepping through mirrors stripping ourselves of our voices mute and alone. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Meg ma'am? This is eloquent! I wish I could convey something of substance nearly s well. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whoa...this hit home |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Here are two fine examples of why I admire your poetic talent and fascinating mind... ~ "Here I sit, living backwards and accepting it.." ~ "For we are stepping through mirrors stripping ourselves of our voices"  EA |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
HI Meg... thereis so much within this....powerful...and well expressed... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Good write! Enjoyed especially the lines highlighted by E.A. and ditto her comments. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Meghan! I very much enjoy your work. Hugs~Nancy Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
this is very good...thanks for sharing........ |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
the salt in the tears can be from all the resistance in life ... the un-salted ones are irrestible!! .... you have grown more beautiful! CT A word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Wow, Kaoru...powerful poem....liked it very much. ....jo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I cannot always untie the knots..." a very basic truth...well said! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I love this...although...it makes me cry... "I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very expressive poem, Kaoru. Addiction of any kind is so hard on the partner or friend. Understanding where this came from.....jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Excellence....this is marvelous writing, even for you, and the message priceless. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"people love you, you make them laugh" Lots of really great lines in this Meg...but those lines I quoted gave me a chill of recognition... Sometimes others just don't see the side we see.  wonderful Meg."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Sharksbean Member
since 2005-09-25
Posts 368jax |
i really liked this one keep up the great poetry Kaoru  -may the force be with you in poetry |
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