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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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He is lost his tower grey-- we are connected with black cord knotted at the end/s He searches for light on a path with no end he has my soul I have the key yet, I am the misplaced heart upon his sleeve symbols of what we have, eyes with words in some impossible green He is alone praying for clear skies and dry earth on his orange colored backdrop-- out of touch, a fragment searching for placement I turn the lights out and listen as he feels his way in dark because this is love between the emptiness of stars ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OK.... speechless... will be back later to inhale this one again.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love those ending lines love it! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Breathtaking Lauren.. I am, like Sue,..speechless after reading you. Love ya lady~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
----------------------------------------------------------- He searches for light on a path with no end he has my soul I have the key yet, I am the misplaced heart upon his sleeve --------------------------------------------------------------- I am left, speechless because I have read and re-read these words written by you sweet  You have NO idea, today m'lady of just how much and how closely this hits home and lands in my heart. Gawd Lady L~ You bring me to tears.... |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
A lifeline is only a lifeline if someone grabs hold. Loved this poignant exploration of a heart adrift. Indigo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*touching the screen* I know this connection, and it's like being the tail on a kite cut loose to love someone who is locked into such loneliness... *hearthugs* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lauren I know I am taking the easy way out, but I'd like to say "ditto" to all the fine replies that your poignant poem engendered! Loves 'n hugs, Linda |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
he has my soul I have the key yet, I am the misplaced heart upon his sleeve ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I turn the lights out and listen as he feels his way in dark because this is love between the emptiness of stars ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ my oh my oh my........... that closing verse....... *sigh* yktikykik  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
He is alone praying for clear skies and dry earth on his orange colored backdrop-- out of touch, a fragment searching for placement I suppose this holds true for so many, and your phrasing is exquisite as ever. You've a beautiful heart and soul, Lady Lauren~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all for understanding and reading...I appreciate your name being here.... ~ Karen--thank you for understanding the connection.... hugsss and muwwwaaahhhsss to alll.....  ~~*~~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
you write with such eloquence -  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Laruen, this reaks of empathy and sorrow for a loved one...you wish so much they could see, your realize, the person you fell in love with, wasn't really that person you thought he was, actually, your love for that person, becomes a concern and pity, knowing what they are throwing away, yet, also knowing, we've got to allow them their journey...sometimes people never grow...and there is nothing we can do to help others...sometimes I believe by consentrating on our own spiritual growth, we will help others without words, but by being a living example. I don't know if I've touched base on what you've written here, but, it's what this elegant write has sparked in my conscienceness....well done! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
he has my soul I have the key yet, I am the misplaced heart upon his sleeve ~*~ it is those "at odds" times when we hang on tightest...  |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Beautiful as always, greeneyes. Thank you for this. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, your poetry always leaves me speechless. I love it. And I love your new photo, too. Hugs, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it one of your best writes |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is very good. You use "I" only to gesture to your subject. The symbolisms work very well. It's a woman's poem. I doubt a man could write it. John |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren A beautiful and compassionate poem...your phrasing as always, exquisite! |
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