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IndigoEve
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Etched in the illusion of time

0 posted 2004-11-07 07:50 AM


Helen hears her mother in the kitchen every morning at 7:35,
reading herself the Bible, and talking away her sins.
She paints her cuticles with cheap nail polish,
and picks through the cigarette containers,
counting how many it had been since yesterday -
her mother still smoked while reading herself the Bible,
and talking away her sins from another night before.
He had left early, touched Helen's head
too long,
more than the others.
And there lay his used woman,
still sleeping from the late evening;
Helen always pretended to do the same,
and saw how he paused
longer than the others
and threw money upon Mama's unconscious form.
In a few hours, she would be roused by what could only be
the black God's hand,
but Helen awoke sooner (always) to allow space for wondering
if these nocturnal men knew what secrets she held:
That her mother would weep,
and the bruises stretch painfully across her rouge-stained fingers
as she clawed at her face in shame -
though not before reading herself the Bible, word for word,
and talking away her sins to the stale morning air.



If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

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1 posted 2004-11-07 08:39 AM


IndigoEve~
You word-paint the characters brilliantly~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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2 posted 2004-11-07 01:03 PM


Amazing write, IndigoEve!
You have so much talent!

~Alli~

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Aenimal
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3 posted 2004-11-07 01:06 PM


mercilessly raw slice of life. your talent grows with every write. more.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-11-07 02:47 PM


Fantastic write...perfect imagery..very much enjoyed.
Hugs~Nancy

Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-11-07 03:14 PM


Oh WOW is right!

yes.. more please.

i'm keeping this.

Maree

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2004-11-07 08:58 PM


This write was so pure it brought chills within me...tears
What you capture here is brilliant.
TD

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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2004-11-07 09:03 PM


Regret, encapsulated to biblical, is still
a four letter word of moment...or place


Excellent job, here...

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