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Eyes (masquerade)
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She stands now veiled by this mist for I breathed from depths cold and it met her warm exhale to hide those cracked knees so long used to beseech for some lover unknown to her Undressing the night her bare light leads me along this swell of sand and I wonder if she would find my touch pleased her as it moved against her skin wrapped wet by mine Come the waves again and dawn will clear the sky leaving her exposed and this long strand will be unchanged yet she'll have known Poseidon's eyes I like Ed, should have offered huge apologies to the poet.. ( chuckling) so I will now add them as an afterthought.. I could never do justice to your style or way with images.. but consider the humble attempt a compliment, please, not an insult... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
just outstanding, Chief.... the wind rushes gently against the skin, in this... so much love, **baby blue** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
These are certainly not Betty Grable's eyes... no, howdy! Very, very good... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You, El Capitan, have the eyes of Poseidon, the soul of a poet and a Venusian heart.  EA |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*sigh*a waterbed write Dawn.... [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (10-25-2004 11:31 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...wonderful write.. I have a couple writers in mind who's mask you could be wearing.... I'll wait in this before I guess. ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
extremely poignant... thank you for writing and sharing so lovely and tender |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh soooo beautiful......lovely lovely  i see alot of Maree in this (the imagery) tell us who?? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I see a few poets this could be so I'm going to just wait to see what the consensus comes up with....but a few do come to mind....grinz....I just can't make up my mind! Well done sir... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Requires better scrutiny than I've been using... I'll be back! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well heck I would like to think you are wearing a mask of the Yeti  but then you seem a lot like Ice there too. Can not wait until the masks come off. Hats off to you as you are out of your own character in this one for sure. Sheesh maybe you are wearing a dress, and speak Australian even?[This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-26-2004 01:28 AM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Very clever Ron...but I caught it!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I could name three female poets that come to mind in this... all lovely poetesses... so give... please? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yes I see a few, but i havent been guessing too well, so... like Karilea... give! oh er please?  and I am haunted |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is simply lovely - but who? Hmmmmmm - I too can see several - - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This reads like a duet between Maree and Ed . . . this is beautiful, Ron |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Smile. I think I know. but you be a rascally thang yourself, Cap. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
oops . . . *smile* |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Maree? has to be |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Raph... you got it.. though my feeble attempt at imitation is far below the way she crafts so tightly and adds the imagery which stands unique to her style.. thanks for playing all... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
My second guess was Dark Angel. I thought that 'dawn' line was a hidden clue. LOL, but you be sneaky! but now I re-read it, yes, I do see Maree. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok I was half right, *smiling* beautiful, Ron |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sir Ron, this is just amazing and thank you for your words and your take on me I am very honored indeed! Now to get to that duet   you lovelyMxx and I am haunted |
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