Some Relationships Tax (not sure I like title)

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Open Poetry #33

Some Relationships Tax (not sure I like title)

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2004-07-16 07:44 PM

Some Relationships Tax

This ache is deep
it reaches from one end
to the other
of each extremity,
creating lethargy,
doomed purpose,
severed longing.

When once
I owned an ache to reach,
to grasp, to hold;
now I own an ache to refrain.

Letting go-
a hoped for reward,
a freedom,
alas,
its trophy
does not materialize.

My sinew
pulsates
a metronome of pain,
empathizing with
my fading strength,
my fraying grip.

The reality
of the cause
adds to the ache
in my heart; a result
of a dirty relationship
clung to, too long.

The only consolation--
my flower bed is almost
weed-free now...well,
on the surface.

But then, the surface
doesn’t always
divulge the full truth.

©July 16, 2004

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-07-16 08:12 PM

Virginia....

whatever caused this write?
I'm hugging you now!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

2 posted 2004-07-16 08:17 PM

LOL, I absolutely loved that 'dirty' relationships line.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2004-07-16 08:42 PM

Thanks for the hug, Sunshine. The cause is there in the 2nd and 3rd stanzas from the end.

Thanks, Midnitesun, I think you got it.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-07-16 11:42 PM

I see the comment about the title, not sure it fits, but the piece itself is well done. I especially like the analogy of what can lie beneath the surface of a well tended bed.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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