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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-07-13 06:37 PM

                     Advice To Puppets
                (a poem in double voice)

Puppet, pull your strings         Please. It’s time.
     surely you know how,        Only dust
   heroes do this and               keeps you from
you’ve felt it haven’t you        the X of life
    felt the puppeteer’s        the handpiece,
     remote connivance        dust, do you hear?
      so many times      Grab the string
  the tug like muscle      it’s on your hand already
          like love                 its name is love
   that fills you with         oh remember
a wooden dance        dance, they demand
    of someone else’s       and you do while sticks
devising, the steps      hover, cruciate blimps
     you didn’t take,         rocking, rocking
      the lift and hold          but not to sleep
      that would be bone        pull it, pull until
     power over your own        they come close
     gravity, sparkle of           enough to grasp.
         your gravid life.     Grasp them. Pull.
      Seize it or lie there       Totter up, up
      and hope for            rise or die
        a tomorrow that       before you’ve
        will never come.         lived.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

1 posted 2004-07-13 07:08 PM

Very well done. I liked the creative presentation James.

believe in what your heart feels...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2004-07-13 07:32 PM

Jamie

Puppets are so poignant...wooden, yet given a heart it seems, by the puppeteer, or those watching as they seem to come alive. Your poem is so well done...both voices, but I especially liked the one on the right. I like this new split way of writing you've developed.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-07-13 08:14 PM

the tug like muscle      it’s on your hand already
          like love                 its name is love
   that fills you with         oh remember
a wooden dance        dance, they demand
    of someone else’s       and you do while sticks

~*~

For some reason
these lines hit me with such dramatic intent...

thank you, James...

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-07-13 08:16 PM

Very interesting read, thought inducing.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-07-13 09:34 PM

bravo, bravo, bravo! Encore!

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2004-07-13 09:53 PM

Sometimes, two spectacular solo voices don't blend well... one overpowers the other... In responsive readings, one takes the lead... in sound and echo, the echo merely repeats and adds nothing. But both of these are so strong, so superb... and so utterly poignant. I love this, my friend... once again, you've taken poetry to a new level!

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2004-07-14 06:24 AM

seems to me, after reading this master piece that both voices possess the same heart, two voices as one, to sing out great things...

sitting here in awe James, brilliant!

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

8 posted 2004-07-15 01:30 AM

Glad to read your poetry again. Your creativity overwhelms me.

misc'e

Midnitesun

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Gaia

9 posted 2004-07-16 09:09 PM

thank you, for allowing us to see
the puppetry

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