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~Rhyme Without Reason~
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~Rhyme Without Reason~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Rhyme Without Reason~  Time and space, my dreams erased, I'm lost inside of me. No pain, no gain...a heartaches refrain, loneliness wont let me be. To have and to hold...until we get old ... die trying to live this lie. A twist of fate, the loss too great, I could drown in the tears I cry. Come what may, you were taken away, only my promises get me thru. Breaking my heart...fate keeps us apart, but...I will always belong to you. Janet Marie In the time we've known That we each are a part of one another We've lost as much as we have won... And as our lives have grown We have found that it only brings us pain To hang on to the things that we have done... ***Still I love the times you've come*** Jackson Browne |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Fits my mood tonight. Like the rhyme scheme, did this piece justice it did. -*Hope the dream. ---*Wish the future. ------*Live the now. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well I see much reason behind this rhyme, as well as pain. This truly aches janet, a beautiful but very sad work. michael |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Sad but honest. I like that!!! The rhyme was good too  Jennifer |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Always a pleasure to read your work Again brilliant Walter Accross the skies we fly together you and i we stop and swoop away to play with winds of the day Now your lost from the day i cannot find your beauty my dray still i look till the break of a thousand days Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I can't help noticing your signiture verse corosponds so well with your poem here. I loved the ryhme on this too! Joy Gather ye rosebuds while ye may, Old time is still a-flying, And this same flower that smiles today To-morrow will be dying. -Robert Herrick |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Beautiful. Love the rhyme pattern. Jannel |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Janet. . . The sadness radiates throughout this poem. . . wonderful work my frined. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Well done i enjoyed this one alot. It hit home with me and the emotions it contained 'Cause if the face inside can't see the light I know I'll have to walk alone And if I walk alone to the other side I know I might not make it home (creed) |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Exactly!!! The feelings my heart felt, when it was broken in two. Though I know I belong to him, my heart he will not embrace.... This poem is very nicely stated, and well written. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
Amazingly spells out my life. Extremely vivid pictures it paints for me. Well written. Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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