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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
A KISS To know darkness eternal To shun the sun and its light These things I did not realize When I took my first delight To live through all eternity Until the end of time Eternal life, eternal youth These things I did desire He held the gift out to me A present of his love He made me want it all His power, his strength, his love I took the gift, embraced it Gave my soul to him For him I gave my life's blood From him I took new life The night became my playground The moon my brightest light I learned to eat a different meal To drink a different wine I've traveled through time forgotten Where others cannot go Watched humanity change and grow I took what I wanted most To embrace a new soul each night This I crave and need To fortify my eternal life And satisfy my greed The madness grows inside me Each night I take a meal On day I'll suffocate From the insanity I'll feel What a fool you are to think I care What you may think or feel 'Tis a human condition, morality Love me if you dare Think of all I could give you My power, my strength, my love All you must do is embrace it My gift of a vampire's kiss |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Beautiful, and something I enjoyed reading. Creepy yet fun. I hope to see more of your work around! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Very very good, Lady B...very good imagery and use of metaphors...I have a friend who often writes about vampires...h'ed love this one...  "...she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough...I'm a little bit rusty...and I feel like my head is caving in, and I dont know if I've ever been really loved- by a hand thats touched me, and I feel like somethings gonna give...and I'm a little bit angry... Well...this aint over..NO not yet...not while I still need you around"... matchbox 20 |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
TanAngel and Janet Marie, Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. This is the only poem I've written about vampires, but I love reading about them. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This poem is well written. First one I've seen about Vampire's and this would be hard to beat. Nice work! Danny |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
lady bere... i liked it a lot...it's almost eerie at the end...very forceful and strong..."a kiss" see you around you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
Danny and Avanti, I wanted to thank you for your comments. This was one of those poems that just flowed from beginning to end. Once I started, I couldn't stop until it was done. Who would have thought that a little story written by an Irish drunkard, called "Dracula", could influence the mind to such poetic expression. There have been no revisions, so it's good to know it went over well. Thank you, LB< !signature--> Without darkness there is no light Without the light we cannot see the dark Balance...It heals the soul [This message has been edited by Lady Bere (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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star83 Junior Member
since 2000-02-27
Posts 26SD |
Simply exquisite. "True love is like a ghost; everybody talks about it but few have seen it." La Rochefoucauld |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
unique subject and a totally awesome post all together. very neat. i dug it alot. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
I can't really say a lot that hasn't already been said, but I felt it deserved some sort of reply. I really enjoyed this. Jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
I liked that, THAT WAS KOO! Written superbly, really vivid picture, specially the night visions..... Perfect! Much love, One love, PEACE |
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