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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-02-08 07:26 PM



A Critical Byplay – Ergo, Tangent of Poet

First, you must go here…  
/pip/Forum28/HTML/001099.html
In order to truly understand
what this poem is all about…

But, let me add a small prelude to the main part
of my own in CA…


So many come, yet they fall ~
by mighty pen they’d stand so tall
yet commiserate?  T'is not their claim;
they seek, by God, their own sweet fame…

~*~

And if right be all writ in verse,
I take my friends by their own curse;
for I in free-est verse shall stand,
yet learn among the learned hands...

for I would not among you say
that all is but just one way;
I hold you all so dear to heart!
and I, a mere poet, shall not part

nor divide my soul among this ken
who woulds't amuse, by poet's pen
no, I shall hold you all to bear
the standard of a poet, rare.

My give to you might be too long...
but my heart? my friends, is yet too strong
to see division of what is best...
for we've not Shakespeare himself to wrest.

May I admire all that you try?
May I laugh, and find the cry
in how your words strike deep my heart?
For I, a mere poet, shall not depart.

~*~

Poets, our Critical Analysis Forum is as
Open as Open
And there for everyone.
I hope more and more of you take advantage of its worth.
We have a whole lot of good critiquing going on in there.



© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Grover
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1 posted 2004-02-08 07:33 PM


Okay, will take your advice! Good work here! Grover.
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2 posted 2004-02-09 12:46 PM


the standard of a poet, rare'''
just as our sunshine....lovely this lovely you!

~~**~~
You read before you words I write-
See before you my soul,
spinning on  waves of thought,
painting memories of time

kayjay
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3 posted 2004-02-09 11:33 AM


Well, first of all, 'tis fairly said
that all words here are closely read.
I think CA is worth the time
one spends to work upon a rhyme.

And if you write in free-est verse
You probably could do much worse.
So share your writes with those who care
enough to judge you, if you dare.


Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Endlessecho
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4 posted 2004-02-09 12:26 PM


Beautiful.  It's by seeing differant sides that we are able to grow and learn.  
Toerag
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Ala bam a
5 posted 2004-02-09 12:58 PM


Have you seen that movie?..."Finding Ergo?"....oh, never mind...Ergo...that's what Balladeer has a big one of isn't it?....cute write gal....
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2004-02-11 12:39 PM


yet learn among the learned hands...
===============================

Im trying dear one...Im trying.
you tangent with the best of them girlie.

The work of language deserves our greatest care ...
for the tongue’s fire may devour the world or may light the way.

S.R.Sanders

Death
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Twilight
7 posted 2004-02-11 12:59 PM


TangentsTouchTimeRevealsRepeats
ProdigalsReappear at the very oddest
TimesInspire match to flame
A CandleBurningWindwardFlailing
HearkensWeartherNot Simply
Continues its LightSeenOrNot

Sending a little light thy way
Death is Back ( Unfortunately some might say)
aka
Kj

"Sooner or later, Death makes a believer out of just about everyone."

iliana
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8 posted 2004-02-11 01:30 PM


I really enjoyed this, Sunshine.  And thanks for the invitation to the other forum -- someday, when I'm brave, I may check it out.
garysgirl
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9 posted 2004-02-11 04:23 PM


I ditto what iliana said......
though it will probably be a very
long time before I get that brave,
dear SunshineyOne.
Hugs  
Ethel

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