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Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-02-01 02:49 PM

you asked
"are you jealous"

jealous of rain wetting lips
too far away from the stain of my own
as they swell from the thought of just
one kiss
lightly pressed
forever felt
within the moment of a moment
caught
caught by the fingers
lightly tracing circles on your chest
where beat upon beat
a pulse can be felt by the eyes
to the throat
as it yields to the depth
of your voice

©snow'03

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

1 posted 2004-02-01 03:15 PM

Mmmmm very strong and passionate...love this :-)

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2004-02-01 04:13 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully passionate, sweet friend, I love it, who wouldn't be jealous of the joy of love, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Snow, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2004-02-01 04:16 PM

Awesome! I enjoyed this.

Tais
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 92
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2004-02-03 02:38 PM

Snow, this is a very romantic write.
So well written, nicely expressed.

Tais

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2004-02-03 02:44 PM

so gentle...so passionate...flows so freely it is almost lyrical

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-02-03 03:27 PM

Softly sensual...very nicely said indeed.
Hugs~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2004-02-03 07:14 PM

sensual and lovely

*s
M

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2004-02-03 07:21 PM

Wow Snow, I have a feeling he was surprised
by your answer...

If he was, he is a very lucky man

If he wasn't, he's even luckier

Snow, this was really nice

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

9 posted 2004-02-03 07:24 PM

thank you all so much for your comments on this. :-)
richy.... maybe one day when there is a "he" he'll think like you just did.

thank you!!

snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

10 posted 2004-02-04 01:41 AM

I love this one too. Back to the top with it too!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2004-02-04 02:03 AM

very sensual...soft write

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

12 posted 2004-02-04 02:12 AM

kevin, you've made me smile way too much tonight :-) thank you!

passing shadows, soft is how it's meant to be.. i'm glad you could feel that. thank you!
snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

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