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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Petals fall softly each one dropping, stripping away dignity lands upon the ground crumbles, seeds blowing away carried upon winds of destiny drifting to another time another place.. The stem yet standing among remaining petals SCREAMING to regain beauty once held within, never gaining knowledge, that beauty, although faded in time does not die but is regained in the future, nourished by the brightness of light. The beauty has not died~ it has simply moved on to new life. {repost} It's better than I could have planned.. it's made me who I am... {Trace Adkins} |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
The beauty has not died~ it has simply moved on to new life. Beautiful writing, Donna!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Timely repost... very. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Thanks Ethel. Seems my graphics are fighting with me this morning and time is limited before work so I will have to play with the graphics later. Hugs hon, have a great day |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write sweet lady! Very much enjoyed. Hugs~
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you blossom each and every day here within these robin-egg blue pages, sweet friend, beauty always fills your soul and words, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Well done, the capitals etc are quite effective, and you close very well compliments "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is just terrific - I am glad you reposted as I didn't see it before - I will read it several times taking in the wonder of your writing - Paul |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
poppin in quickly to say thanks everyone! Hugs |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
lovely... very gentle regards sudhir |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
There is so many talented poeple in this place its hard to be a critic. Personally I liked your poem. It's nice seeing Free style done well. I liked the imagery. The only thing I would say, and maybe, the flow got funky a bit by the "Seeds blowing" Typically when you start new subjects you put a space, but if not maybe..."Crumbles" next to "seeds blowing". I would be afraid add any other sujestions, because it may change the meening of the poem which would kind of be evil. lots of love -Juju |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
That is my belief...James |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* the gentle petals that still reach for the nurturing sunlight of truth...for inside each of us is where the true beauty of the flower resides....I love it... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
very nice, touched me  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
timely indeed thank you |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nicely done...well-focused and extremely well-written...I loved the tightness and compactness of the form...the beauty of its layered message was crystal clear, as well... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is special and so very lovely. Makes me think of seeds that blow in the wind and bloom on their own. I've got a few of those in my yard, and ironically they are the ones that continue to thrive. Just beautiful, Donna~ |
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