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Telling Times ( Lesssons from shadow 4)
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Telling Times ( Lesssons from shadow 4) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“Watch!” she said as I turned my head again to relive the burn of sun on eyes trying not to feel fatigue from knee locked stand since early sunrise. “See how the stones scattered as they are” her voice began to say “take bites out of your shadow?” I nodded once and let my mind go To wander Thinking more of sitting down Drinking cool water Than I was of lessons “Pay attention” she laughed Leaving me with head snapping jerk To watch the stone’s darker mass First seem covered by this darker part of me Then to disappear inside the shadow of the stone “This is how others are” “They consume and absorb your shadow but watch closely, for when the sun moves and time changes you are freed again.” “Whole” she said I nodded as I stared The slip of time passing me first through stone Then stone through me And finally to me alone A paler grey than when joined. I looked at her And for her shadow too Wanting it to join with mine Or mine with hers But saw the sun passed her through And only light was there No shades of grey on ground No darker patch against the bright “how can it be you have no shadow now?” I asked “Mine was stolen long ago” she replied “By one who tried to teach me what I teach now” “I borrow now the greys” I heard her sigh “For he who was took mine.” I turned decidedly confused And stood silent, watching my own Drift without sound On this stony hard packed ground Then heard my own voice say “Tell me then would you share mine?” |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 I'm keepin this one too..you are incredible.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
“I borrow now the greys” I heard her sigh “For he who was took mine.” ~*~ A very telling tale... but only for those who know gray. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh my...   "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron.... I always knew there were lessons in shadows, I just didn't know what they were until now. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very unique... a great write! I did, however, stumble on the line, “See how the stones scattered as the are.” Did you mean to say "they" or "arc?" Grover. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I looked at her And for her shadow too Wanting it to join with mine Or mine with hers But saw the sun passed her through And only light was there No shades of grey on ground No darker patch against the bright “how can it be you have no shadow now?” I asked “Mine was stolen long ago” she replied “By one who tried to teach me what I teach now” “I borrow now the greys” I heard her sigh “For he who was took mine.” I turned decidedly confused And stood silent, watching my own Drift without sound On this stony hard packed ground Then heard my own voice say “Tell me then would you share my grey?” ========================================== sheesh...I just gave her mine.......... (would give your muse mine too)  these are so hauntingly, poetically, superb.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a series I don't want to end! Keep writing... I'll keep learning. *S* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I didn't know there were lessons in shadows... but I do now  M. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
If she didn't say "yes", will I do? You are amazing Cap. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
again....amazing your muse is beautiful....  ~~**~~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My, my, my.....awesome! hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Back to the top |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know why this one caught my eye glad it did |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"See how the stones scattered as they are” her voice began to say “take bites out of your shadow?” Cpat Hair, I really like how you built upon this! Greatly enjoyed... Sadelite |
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Death Member
since 2001-05-26
Posts 112Twilight |
NIce job Ron LOTS of imagery Methinks thou has hardly lost thy touch Not after reading your latest offerings And come now, you can choose the weapon of your choice, promise I will trample thy rosebushes. These people have never seen such. And we could go back to real time, using the reply section. I shall even toss aside the broadsword, and pick the equally dented rapier. It would be fun and you know it. when thou art ready, meet on the foredeck. By the way, had problems with my white Roses last year- Stuarts and lancasters don't you know. Sounds like you are still water adventuring. Good for you- really do ennjoy the images these bring forth. As always My Compliments Les Capitain Regarde- ( hoped that would cone back to this tired gray matter.- you know use it or lose it) Avoir and Merci "Sooner or later, Death makes a believer out of just about everyone." |
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