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buckysimone
Junior Member
since 2003-10-19
Posts 27


0 posted 2003-11-27 12:49 PM


reaching up
my hands for the sky.
the ship slowly submerges
gallons of water
pour through my mouth
holding
my breath.
minutes and hours pass
through the rushing
fury
blinded by the salt
bleeding fingernails
burning eyes.
thrusting
my arms against the current
darkness subsides
in my eyes
i see it all.
on top of the world
screaming at the top of my lungs
sharing
with the world
i’m reaching up



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Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2003-11-27 02:59 PM


I liked this. Good job.

I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX

young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
2 posted 2003-11-27 03:10 PM


hmmm...it was pretty good....hmmm...some of the lines were too broken up for me though...so i dunno.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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