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Baby_Angel123
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since 2001-10-12
Posts 63
Unity, ME

0 posted 2003-09-28 10:25 AM



Remembering

Only in this world,
for barely six months,
and yet you have touched,
the hearts of all of us.

For these tears the you see,
as you watch down upon us,
are not tears of sadness,
buttears of joy.

Joy of all the memories,
in which you have gavin us,
to keep in our hearts,
as we remember you.

So I guess the only thing,
that’s lefts to say,
is we love you,
and we’ll see you at the gates,
when it is our time,
to play with you,
yet once again.

Dedicated to Tyler Joseph Kelly 2/22/03~9/8/03.


Always fight for what you believe in!

[This message has been edited by Baby_Angel123 (09-28-2003 10:28 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Heather - All Rights Reserved
young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-09-28 04:07 PM


this one was pretty good. i straight up liked the whole dedication thing. try and explore ways to make this a bit more in depth though, but still a great job done.
magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
2 posted 2003-09-29 10:18 AM


this was sooo sad.. almost brought a tear to my eye. I like how you said your tears are not just of sadness, but of joy. I agree with you there, even though something is taken from us, the memories can last a lifetime. Thanks for sharing.
Baby_Angel123
Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 63
Unity, ME
3 posted 2003-10-13 08:58 AM


Thanks for your replies!
~Angel~

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

4 posted 2003-10-24 09:46 AM


sniffle sniffle
monkey
Junior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 27

5 posted 2003-11-13 06:33 PM


awww! this was such an awesome poem! i loved it even tho it was very sad.
Devils Angel 666
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since 2001-11-30
Posts 71
CT, USA
6 posted 2003-11-23 04:13 PM


Good poem babe... It's a good thing that I decides to come on here and take a look cuz I know you weren't going to tell me lol!  Good poem again babe and I do agree with the first person in the replys list.
Ally Stone
Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 48
D.C.
7 posted 2003-11-23 06:48 PM


Tissue alert!! Wow, I need this like I need Romeo and Juliet...and I was in such a happy mood! Good write by the way, especially the first bit.
---A---

broken627
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since 2003-11-26
Posts 66
Eugene Oregon
8 posted 2003-11-27 03:16 PM


i want to say goodbye to you
but i cant your not here to say it to
just give me something
so i can be set free
i know theres no chance of there being another u and me
i dont think you know the impact youve had on me
all i can do is sit with a blank stare
knowing that when i look at my phone your name wont be there
so i took advantage of your love for me
just give me a chance...one more
i know you dont need me
or even want me
but there is one thing i need to tell you
before this us thing is tossed out the window completly
if i ask you sweetly
will you return to me

broken627
Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66
Eugene Oregon
9 posted 2003-11-27 03:22 PM


woops i totally posted that in the wrong spot i meant to send that this was a beautiful poem it definetly made me cry!
keep on writing!
-*-Broken627-*-

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