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Teen Poetry #7

Loveless Life

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2004-12-13 10:59 PM

My heart shakes
With each beat,
It bleeds,
And burns,

The same fire that
Once gave warmth,
Now leaves behind,
Ashes of lost love,

Why did I loose you?
I don’t even recognize
The love that once filled
Your soul and mine,

My dreams and hopes,
In one instance,
Were taken away,
Stolen beneath my eyes,

My barren heart,
Has lost its clothing,
A war broods now,
Quietly I die,

Slowly withering,
No hope can sway me,
No beat can make right,
What a puzzle this is,

Lost the love,
But love never lost.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2004-12-13 11:09 PM

Wow, this is such a powerful piece. The first stanza really drew me in, but I think the 5th was my favorite.
Im sure alot of people can relate to this, as I have.
You described the feeling perfectly.
Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-12-13 11:37 PM

"The same fire that
Once gave warmth,
Now leaves behind,
Ashes of lost love,"

I liked that stanza...it just seemed to jump out at me. I think that this is a well written emotional piece.
Keep Posting!

~Alli~

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