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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
roses r red violets r blue i miss u so much why did you have to leave years passes by and you havent been in my life for a long time why did you have to leave like the wind ? why did you say good bye ? was it some thing i said or was it something i did ? So again roses are red violets are blue i miss you so much wont you come back to me ? please write me a comment or something Thanks!!!!!!!!! |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hmmm...it didnt rhyme, and thats okay, but the flow felt a little off. It is good that you tried a new approach though. As for the meaning it the poem, i could definetely relate to it. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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dodge_chick2003 Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136California |
I agree with Kissa, it didnt rhyme but thats ok not all poems have to rhyme. The strcture was a little off but I too can relate to the meaning |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
It drives me nutso when people do "r" instead of "are", but otherwise id say it was alright http://www.nexopia.com/profile.php?uid=34810 <--all me baby! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I also don't really like it when people use "r" instead of the whole word....but I don't really care that much. I liked this poem too, and I liked the fact that it didn't rhyme. Overall, great job...thumbs up!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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