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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world 
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Why don’t you just erase me, Act like I was never there, Act like you never said those words, Act like you never cared. Why don’t you just crush me, Take my heart out of my chest, Maybe it won’t hurt as much, Maybe it would be best. Why don’t you just tell me You don’t care about me anymore? That way I could move on, Repair the heart you tore. Why don’t you go back in time, Tell me no, we can’t be? That way, though it would hurt, I would eventually come to see. Now what do I do? What am I supposed to say? I can’t beg you to remember, I can’t beg you to let me stay. Is it really that easy, to Erase me from your world? after loving me, now ignoring me, after you sent me through that whirl? Do you know how much it hurts, To know you can just forget? Forget all of which you made me believe, Believing that we were set. Why don’t you just erase me, Act like I was never there, This hurts more than anything else, Knowing that now you won’t care. _erin Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Erin, That is very well expressed and an excellent write. I think I know the intensity of those feelings. And for those who have not experienced you have provided a serious clue. Peace... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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TheBrokenSilence New Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 3CA, United States |
That was very good. I really liked it. I beleive that's exactly how I felt at one point of my life. Excellent Work! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow Erin...I think this might be my favorite from you!  Is this written from experience..? It probably is so...  Great poem, it was an amazing piece and it flowed great too! I'm going to save it in my library.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Wow...amazing. I really loved it. I could really feel this. I am going through exactly the same thing. I dont think i could have put it any better. I think i will save this... Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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dodge_chick2003 Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136California |
This is actually the best poem I think I have read on here. I have been there before and belive me you will move on. I know it feels like you wont, but you will eventually find someone better and this will only be a memory. Keep posting |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
that was so freaking good omg i wish i could of read that poem to my ex when we broke up that was exactly how i felt... wow that was awesome GREAT job |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
I loved this one! Gonna add it to my library I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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