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Teen Poetry #7

existence

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

0 posted 2004-07-10 06:51 PM

Joy of eternal nothing.
The hand that can not grasp,
grasping at the painting i can not see.
Seeing what i know,
and knowing what i see.
Peace, and a lacking over abundance
of chaos under order.
A mind that can not think,
and concepts it can not grasp,
reaching forever onward.
Fighting for it's feet.
It's feet with no ground to hold it,
upon the lasting sea.
The life wasted upon it,
for everyone to see.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-07-11 09:21 PM

I'm not overly fond of this.
I get what you are trying to convey,
but it seems kind of choppy, and vague.
Which might have been the point, I dont know...

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