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southern sweetheart Junior Member
since 2003-12-28
Posts 18 |
i have a hard time telling you whats on my mind expressing the way i feel involving you in my life the story was never happy to many tears were shed i hurt alot of loved ones through my not so many years you tell me open up i'll feel better right the truth there's just no good insight but please dont worry or cry over me if u wanna go and never look back i can understand and want get mad i dont want to put you through this living hell |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
its a very nice poem...it could use some work though...a tip if i may...to keep the flow going right, be sure to add spaces between the lines...that way it the poem doesnt seem like its being condensced If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear. I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips. -Rosco |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
You know what's crazy. I know how you feel. I have so much "emotional baggage" and it's hard for me to open up to anyone because I don't want them to have to deal with any of it, even if it is indirectly. I don't want them to feel what I do, so I keep it bottled up. But one day, you'll meet someone that will force you to unload it all, and never let them go. Because I did, and it was the worst mistake I've made my entire life. You can't do it all by yourself, and I think that was the hardest thing for me to learn. Ehh, and I still haven't. But keep your head up, and someone will change your mind eventually  And keep writing!! That helps sooo much**You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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