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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I guess it stands for the side where the wind doesn't blow. For now it is the side I stand on. Emotional overload. Emotional numbness. How could I think I see you and not feel. So much going on inside, love, longing, regret. Will you now get a restraining order, because I saw you? Because I crossed into your turf? It's only been a year. Since I saw you last, you and I exchanged a glance, and you looked away. Too much time passed, yet not enough. I can still feel your presence near. Why, why so stupid of me to try. I hate myself. I hate that I still love you. I hate that I was the one who hurt you. I hate the the feeling that I still feel; that you may have been the only one who was ever worth it. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
This is cool. I really liked the first two lines. "I guess it stands for the side, where the wind doesn't blow, For now it is the side i stand on." However long the night, the dawn will break. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
H_E-Thank you so much for reading and responding. I appreciate. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I like this. I agree with H_E. The first two lines were awesome. Very nice. ~lol~ !Vampire Kisses!  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Kissa_Richelle, thank you, I appreciate. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
I hate the the feeling that I still feel; that you may have been the only one who was ever worth it. i loved that particular line great stuff =gemini LOR In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow i really like this one. i really felt wat you are going through. i am in that exact position. i hate it too. its so painful and its such a struggle. you really expressed urself well in this poem i loved, like evry1 else did, your opening lines. awesome way to captivate the audience and get us interested. very very hardcore keep rockin darkness You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
silhouetted: many thanks darkness_witch: Wow!, Thank you!, and thx for understanding. |
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