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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA 
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if you see a butterfly twice in one life does that constitute a miracle? if you reach out for that beauty further this time does that mean your will has grown stronger? if the object at hand flies towards your hand...and lands... does that mean the attraction it saw was real? if you pull off both of it's wings does it still have ability to fly towards your love? i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Omg, this was beautiful. I like the way you write. Nice work. Just beautiful. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Even if it doesn't fly it could walk. How strong are the hands mentioned? Exercise makes everything stronger. Beautiful work. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ow - this speaks to me of great confusion and pain - of a defensive soul who has lost trust - sad. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
I agree with Susan on this one. This is very well done, and the picture conveyed is so alluringly pretty up to the very stark change in the wing-pulling question. Wow. I also concur with GIS ~ it could still walk if it truly feels it is worth the pain. Loved it, eve... Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself... |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
really really liked this poem. And as hollow said i love the way you write. I agree with everything said here so theres not much more i can say! love and empathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
I always did say that we don't need any wings to fly to our sojourn of desires. Nice pen Eve. wayne If nothing is something |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
wow, and an even better response poe! thank you! your one-liner made my day, as there's hope after all! i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
I really like the whole poem, but these lines the most. "if you pull off both of it's wings does it still have ability to fly towards your love?" A short and very profound question, EG. Though it may not have a short answer.  coyote |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
"if the object at hand flies towards your hand...and lands... does that mean the attraction it saw was real?" This was brilliant! I love this line. I'll test the ability of which you inquired. I've someone in mind to see How well they fly wingless. I really enjoy your works! "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm |
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