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Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

0 posted 2004-09-07 07:52 PM

I feel that the palm trees
Have muted me
And this California sun
Is drying up my eyes
Spinning the blood
From the tires
Headed in a tinted direction

This is not what we demanded
We’ve got our stylized lips
Cigarette smoke, blowing from our hair
Back towards our bolted closets

It seems that the ocean waves
Had a way with me
These California girls
Are covering my knife
Why must we inhale the sky?
Filled with mosquito’s
That are smoking from a gun

This is not what we demanded
We’ve got our stylized lips
Pink nails, from beneath your rims
Inside our bolted body bags

Forgive me my pouting eyes
It is not these summer skies
Or the gravel spitting back at you
But, the ocean
Where I sway
Gone to stay
Where I sway amongst ocean eyes…

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-09-07 08:59 PM

wow..i really like this.

Very beautiful i must say...

The begginning was the best i think...

I'm saving.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

2 posted 2004-09-07 11:22 PM

reminds me of the song by tool called Enima

"the only way to fix it is to flush it all away"

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-09-08 07:38 PM

Ryan!!!

*grin*

this IS a tune . . .
I adore the quirky beatstyle
you have here . . .

reminds me of the highway and drifting . . .

Your writing has grown so much
Good to see you . . .

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-09-22 06:27 PM

holy crap.
that is a great description of how cali. really feels.
I loved this so much.
must read...again.

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

5 posted 2004-09-26 04:05 PM

Thanks all for your responces. Greatly appreciated. Nice to see you again little wing.

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

6 posted 2004-10-09 09:04 PM

"These California girls
Are covering my knife"

Interesting line here, Mad Hatter.

Like something "The Ripper" might pen.

Kewl.

CB 8)

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2004-10-09 09:08 PM

I love it. It reminds me of my car I'm having heavy considerations on blowing up. If it won't run I can at least make it look pretty.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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