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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2003-12-04 08:00 PM

Luscious liquor, libation of the bards be told,
Fierce erasings of time’s decay, limitation of the gods
Reflections of mundane glances into the inner soul
As love’s last coupling were instead
Rivulet riders to escape the maelstrom of time
Lacking razored rapiers of souls divided
Or echoes of soft-winged birds of Zephyr floes.

Seek, O wandering soul, the nectar of the sages, then
The parchment of creation will your limit be
Rushing forward in performance on the stage of our lives.

[This message has been edited by steavenr (12-04-2003 08:40 PM).]

jaicie114
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since 2003-09-27

Posts 750
On the edge of forever

1 posted 2003-12-04 09:13 PM

Wow, steavenr...

This is intense...and beautiful.

Thank you!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2003-12-04 10:14 PM

Thanks, Jaicie, but in all fairness, this was simply an extension of an exercise from the English Workshop called an exercise in kennings.

here is the link /pip/Forum32/HTML/000180.html

I just used all the kennings I had created in a single poem

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

3 posted 2003-12-04 10:22 PM

Here is a butterfly for that accomplishment..I love this style of poetry~
~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-12-05 04:17 AM

enchanting

Fire Fairy
Junior Member

since 2003-10-22

Posts 43
Australia

5 posted 2003-12-05 06:09 AM

I really love your style...

I wish I could write so beautifully.

Such wisdom and passionate intensity pours out of your work.

I'm looking forward to reading more!

I truly enjoyed this poem. Your enchanting talent is a blessing to this earth.

Love and Light
Fire Fairy

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2003-12-05 07:06 AM

you wield the word sword with the grace of a gentle butterfly

an enjoyable read

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-05-2003 07:07 AM).]

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

7 posted 2003-12-16 02:27 AM

Really brilliant! You are so gifted. Thanks for sharing this -- it really belongs in a collection, it is so well written.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2003-12-16 02:47 AM

a little surprised to see this one back up,

ARH, thanks for the butterfly—it is appreciated.

passing shadows, thank you for reading and commenting

Fire Fairy, thank you for your kind words

Midnite Sun, thank you for generous comments

Iliana, I am so glad you liked it, but check out the link in my first response if you haven’t already

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