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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

0 posted 2003-12-03 11:34 PM

In Quiet Places

It lives there
in the quiet places
just beyond her eyes,
as gentle as remembered kisses,
softer than a moonlit shadow;

yet that something,
quiet something
there beyond her eyes
eludes me;
like the fragments of a dream
it seeks me out,
but will not let me find it.

For an angel, 1968

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (12-03-2003 11:35 PM).]

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

1 posted 2003-12-03 11:51 PM

loved it...we still have the problem with the main board moving way way faster than the speed of speed but it appears that is just the way it is...oh vey...this could be a much better poetry board if you split this main board...otay I'm done preachin.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2003-12-03 11:51 PM

ED ~

this is so touching, and I found such peace within the words...

Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

pictureme
Member

since 2003-11-28

Posts 248
Ohio, USA

3 posted 2003-12-03 11:52 PM

ahhh the eyes are the mirrors of the soul.
Keep seeking....a beautiful write!
pictureme :-)

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

4 posted 2003-12-04 06:01 AM

Ah, Ed.....I remember those days well....remember the girl, too. THANKS

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

5 posted 2003-12-04 07:08 AM

Good Morning
Hope you are felling better.
This is a soft and gentle write. I close my eyes and see the look filled with love and warmth.
See Ya
Love Bon-Bon

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2003-12-04 09:11 AM

good good morning Ed, ahhh the innocence of wondering about a love admired, does he feel the same about you? And the awesome flowers of delivery when he looks deep into your eyes and says....would you like to go to a movie?

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-12-04 09:18 AM

Beautiful Ed..yes, that 'something' just beyond the eyes...
Lovely this.
Hugs~

~ Let peace begin with me...

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

8 posted 2003-12-04 09:22 AM

Beautiful Ed...simply beautiful.

Eric

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2003-12-04 10:07 AM

Ed....I have seen this same thing, but not so many years ago, perhaps it's a piece of ourselves looking out? A beautiful poem!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-12-04 10:50 AM

Somehow I find myself wondering whether your gentle words with a hint of mystery, could be ascribed to you as well...

This was "softer than a moonlit shadow".

EA

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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2003-12-04 01:18 PM

as gentle as remembered kisses,
softer than a moonlit shadow;

You could as easily be describing this quiet beauty, my friend... for it falls gently from eyes straight to heart. *S*

I can't think of anyone more deserving of encounters with angels than you... thank you for the share of this. *S*

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2003-12-04 01:21 PM

this...this is beautiful

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2003-12-05 08:16 PM

yet that something,
quiet something
there beyond her eyes
eludes me;

You write romance with the softest whisper.
Really love the quiet place you took me to.

Nice one Ed~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

14 posted 2003-12-05 08:45 PM

Very beautiful...a treasure to keep.
TD

C?
Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 190

15 posted 2003-12-05 08:47 PM

Ratleader, more like, RatKINGleader

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

16 posted 2003-12-06 04:10 AM

Really liked this one. This line is magnificent in its imagery:

"as gentle as remembered kisses"

That one speaks volumes.

Sorry that I missed this earlier.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

17 posted 2003-12-08 06:08 PM

What this brings to a mind,
even to an inquisitive mind,
is that you respected her enough
not to pry.

Well done, Sir.

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

18 posted 2003-12-08 08:02 PM

This is so soft and gentle and speaks to many who love and yet cannot get beyond that wall. Sometimes it is better not to try.

I really, really loved this. You're an amazing writer.

Hugs, Marti

'You cannot shake hands with a clenched fist.'
PEACE!!!
Indira Gandhi

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