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Seeing Ghosts
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Seeing Ghosts |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Upon same concrete we have walked arm in arm You almost pass me by high as usual staggering way before midnight Did karma get you tonight? I hear it did. Our movements mirror and we stare standing alone with everybody Passer by chatter dulled I can only hear my chest screaming Noticing odd things The shirt you wear is ugly and what seems to be a hat covers your beautiful eyes Do you know what I was REALLY thinking? I would drop it all just to talk to you So we can be friends Then? your selfishness shines Escape thru taxi door Telling me you're in a bad mood Wallet stolen So I walk in this blackout As friends watch you Telling me how pale you were Whilst I feel Transparent again . . . Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is such a beautifully written peice of poetry, it had me hooked all the way through, but for me the last two lines/stanzas were just perfect. quote: Thanks for sharing this with us  Andy |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Some pains are more than unbearable ... ... they are simply untouchable. How could anyone see you as transparent, is beyond me!! [This message has been edited by ctowen (08-09-2003 09:28 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gemma . . . you know now I was going to take the part about karma - amazing lines then I saw the brush off part and then I read about transparency and decided that this entire write shall be framed as a reminder to myself thank you xxoo |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is haunting. Excellent poetry....straight from your beautiful heart. Eric |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
"I can see clearly now, the rain is gone ..." BUMP!!! (must have been a seagull) |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write,,,,, |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
you have the touch , i am at a loss of words notice the reasons within your eyes wolfy |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Gemma, I'm at a loss for words....... I'm so mad at him for doing you this way.  Hugs and love to you, my little friend  Ethel Mae |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Ugh, you give me goosebumps. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Anguishing ! |
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