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Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-23 02:58 AM

..some days, I
wish I
couldn't cry..

over petty
love
or infatuation..

..or as I see it,
as I've always veiwed it

comfort.

We adapted to eachother,
as I
became subdued in
a wretched spiral.

I wed the idea
of finding
a piece of myself
in
faulty rain..

And falling is
like
growing wings
that don't fly.

Holding on to a
belief that
things work out
well in the end..

Well, when the hell does my end
begin?
When do the
tears stop,
and when can my
anguish ease itself
into
a better posistion?

Being bitter
at this age, my
mother says,
is the way the world
has become..
Feeling dizzy by
the circumstances,
by the
wrong choices and
I've still got a lot more
growing up
to do..

You bring me down..

Fear matches well with your eyes,
and as for guilt don't
get me started..

how the world
twirls itself
around
speeding right by..
yelling to me that

.."things never change
people never change,
you'll never be different..
and the end is just like this
the end is just the same.."

so put down your roses,
show me your thorns, first
and foremost..
hurt me
before
you love me..

and most
importantly..

don't you dare
dry these tears I've cried
if you're the one
who's caused them
to
come down
in the first place..

Mend nothing
sew your invisible eye.
Begone and bygone,
leave my life..

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-08-23 03:02 AM

you have absolutely expressed this well,,
a terrific write,,,

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2003-08-23 03:04 AM

All I can say is....WOW

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

3 posted 2003-08-23 03:44 AM

Fantastic, and I especially loved the power of the next to the last verse here!!! 'Don't you dare dry the tears'.....great poem...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

JilGirl
Member

since 2003-05-24

Posts 364
Washington

4 posted 2003-08-23 04:22 AM

Mend nothing
sew your invisible eye.
Begone and bygone,
leave my life..

MUCH strength and healing
in these last lines.

A NEW beginning is
forthcoming!

Blessings!
Shirl~

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-08-23 10:30 AM

Ah ha ha Meg YES!
show me your thorns before you love me
brilliant . . .
I must say whoever told you this
has never had happiness themselves,

.."things never change
people never change,
you'll never be different..
and the end is just like this
the end is just the same.."

things do change - it is you that spins the wheel . . . fate just decides where it stops . . .
I adored this
xxoo

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2003-08-23 11:11 AM

so put down your roses,
show me your thorns, first
and foremost..
hurt me
before
you love me..

sometimes, yes, there is more truth in this that the guise and gush of starryeyed love,
tho i do prefer to just be blinded most times,
very powerful stuff you've written once again

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

7 posted 2003-08-23 12:08 PM

wow oh wow..much too many beautiful lines to choose from. I loved it!

I wed the idea
of finding
a piece of myself
in
faulty rain..

And falling is
like
growing wings
that don't fly.

For saints have hands that pilgrims' hands do touch,
And palm to palm is holy palmers' kiss.--"Romeo and Juliet"

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2003-08-23 04:42 PM

oh god yes..echoing your one reply...so me as well...I absolutely love this...one of my favourites..into my library most definately!!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (08-23-2003 04:43 PM).]

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

9 posted 2003-08-23 05:03 PM

Every time i think i['ve read your best, you give me more.

this is beautiful.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

10 posted 2003-08-23 06:07 PM

"And falling is
like
growing wings
that don't fly."

OH MY GOSH. You amaze me once again. Your poetry is SO beautiful, I totally mean that. As I said before, you should get published. I know of some good journals . . . !

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

11 posted 2003-08-23 06:12 PM

I wed the idea
of finding
a piece of myself
in
faulty rain..

Well, when the hell does my end
begin?
When do the
tears stop,
and when can my
anguish ease itself
into
a better posistion?

You bring me down..

Fear matches well with your eyes,
and as for guilt don't
get me started..

There.... some of my favourite parts.... I saved my absolute favourite for last....

.."things never change
people never change,
you'll never be different..
and the end is just like this
the end is just the same.."

I know that voice.... *nod* "why should you deserve better?" and "what makes you think that it gets better than this?" *nod* Very well done once again.

Kielo

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

12 posted 2003-08-23 06:19 PM

"Begone and bygone,
leave my life.."

Brilliant conclusion ... by all means please hold on to those words ... bye bye bye.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

13 posted 2003-08-23 09:07 PM

This piece is excellent, whether taken as a poem or as good advice on not getting hurt...

And this....

so put down your roses,
show me your thorns, first

....is priceless!

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