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Albino Lashed |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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From the corner of my eye in whitest white came in the door albino lashed a thought to me for free it fluttered just to left I did my best to still my breath afraid in skirt of small spaced flight I’d turn and rupture such delight Behind me now I felt the smallest wind touch the fold behind my ear with whim like song in key of wonder it beguiled my neck with thought of lovely trust in tangle with my hair a riot of wings and lust Was like the fingers of a cloud I followed it out the door to the blackberry blossomed and looking so like the flying thing the flower and the creature be a mated pair one so still and touched by air the other twirled in and out her thorns with care and I a voyeur to their thrill delight the pale and capture with eyes filled |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You astound me. Such beauty from a cabbage butterfly and a spray of berry blossoms.... I hope some day to gain the sparkling, ethereal grace that is the hallmark of everything you write. Do you know that I study your poems for lessons in how to think poetry? It's a fact. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (04-26-2003 08:55 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Fascinating write, do so enjoy your poetry. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Martie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I always see such precious things when walking in my grandpa's blackberry patches every summer and I always see junebugs flood the raspberry bushes! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Ed is right, as do I. I'm a student of your work. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Marti, So lovely. It is simply amazing what you do with words. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Behind me now I felt the smallest wind touch the fold behind my ear with whim like song in key of wonder it beguiled my neck with thought of lovely trust in tangle with my hair a riot of wings and lust Oh, my, goodness!! I love this Martie!! Gee whiz. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the flower and the creature be a mated pair one so still and touched by air Those couple lines tie this all together, for me. There is so much to see and feel in your writing Martie. A special treat, as always~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
They are some of the most delicate creatures God has created... thank you for this... I miss seeing them, but I see their cousins, the sulpher wings, on the clover.... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I echo ratleader on this, your grace shines...I hope some day to shine as well as you do beautiful poem martie |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Rhyme you? Well glory be, but that was simply just beautiful as it fluttered through Martie. |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
oh wow !!!!!!! i adore your poems martie, you bring such beauty to the page. i loved this one so very much. thanks & hugs from june x |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - your words capture my imagination so that I just close my eyes and your wonderful woven picture plays on my mind and heart - loved it - Paul |
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davidmerriman Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123Dallas, TX |
Good poem. Adept use of figurative language, and overall an enjoyable read. I'd probably change some of the rhymes so it would flow better, but it's a nice, I liked it. [This message has been edited by davidmerriman (04-30-2003 08:57 PM).] |
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termite New Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 9 |
this is a very captivating piece...i love the flow, the word choice, everything. the way you establish meaning is quite interesting -ben |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Martie...I too wish you would give lessons... I want to be able to do this..write as you. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartiSis~ You catch the tiniest winged-thought and follow it to the meadow~ Exquisite .... 'I followed it out the door to the blackberry blossomed and looking so like the flying thing the flower and the creature be a mated pair' From my meadow to your 'flutterbye'~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Enchanting write! You hold your breath ..... yes I can relate to this, I stop moving whenever one of these wonders flies around me and .....I say a little prayer, because I believe that butterflies bring a loving touch of those who are no more around us .... Loved this very very much. Love, Margherita |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Speechless...I don't need to say a thing! Very well done Martie, it always amazes me at what you can do with simple objects that others just pass by and ignore... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
No one is better at capturing a moment... and sharing with us the magic of it. *S* This is so beautiful. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Behind me now I felt the smallest wind touch the fold behind my ear with whim like song in key of wonder it beguiled my neck with thought of lovely trust in tangle with my hair a riot of wings and lust ====================== you had me from the title on..... and Im keeping this enchanting mothy delight   |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully descriptive Martie ... you had me visualizing this mystical moment throughout the entire piece. Just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah Martie you're such a wonderful poet....Your images are so carved out of the heart....Wonderful writing. I haven't been around for a while.....I like the picture. Eric |
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