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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
With a languorous stretch You enticed stuttered syllables From my lips That refused to make words In the normal way of lines That from left to right Read later of things Remembered. Some fell into the well Of your chest as it rose, Each breath a reach closer To mine. Some fell onto the floor Where they swirled around The feet we stood on As if to wash away The dust of miles Others yet trembled In hold to tongue Wishing sweet form To coax from yours Those things inside But hidden The movement in me Stock stilled Even stammered thoughts Put to end I too Extended arms In reach for larger parts of me I had yet to find And wondered Sublime What is it like To hold you? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my. A beautifully written poem - nothing new in that respect, yours are always well done. This has such palpable longing it gave me goosebumps. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I too Extended arms In reach for larger parts of me I had yet to find And wondered Sublime What is it like To hold you?" Oooh myyy yessss.... seems this one left me stuttering and stammering... Wow!...and the ending...amazing..just amazing. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful, enjoyed each line from start to finish, especially the ending |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
If you'll answer the question so will I. Your romantic side is showing, along with a faint trace of smile. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
You do have a gift Ron!!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I run out of experlatives. Just know this--when I read you? I try so hard not to fall into it, and? tsk..just can't help it...like chocolate poetry... mmmmmmmmmmmmmm... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ron, In spite of stuttering...this is quite clear...reminds me in many ways of your another time....just a continuation of the want to with this lady... Enjoyed the insight.. Hugs, Pat  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yeah, right...tongue-tied poet....! I know from experience that when a poet is stammering for words, it's because stammering for words is the very best thing to say just then.....you wily fellow.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) I know this feeling too painfully well, sweet friend, I still have never held a girls hand or even got to have a decent conversation with one and I wonder if I'm capable of love or if I'm just always 10 degrees south of the equator! (sigh) This is poignant longing, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sahring! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hmmm. I hadn't even read this poem before writing my 'stretch me' poem, but I felt myself stretching once again, in pleasure, with this read. As always, you have a way of healing without pain. Keeping this one.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
With a languorous stretch You enticed stuttered syllables From my lips That refused to make words In the normal way of lines That from left to right Read later of things Remembered. Some fell into the well Of your chest as it rose, Each breath a reach closer To mine. Some fell onto the floor Where they swirled around The feet we stood on As if to wash away The dust of miles Others yet trembled In hold to tongue Wishing sweet form To coax from yours Those things inside But hidden ==================== OH GOOD GRIEF!!!!!! How did I miss this yesterday???? you write the ache like few do. (you know that I know)  You're the best I've ever felt ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...Your the poet exceptional! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Atta boy Capt you got them all in the palm of your hand m'friend ...grin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
that's palms...plural, Raph  |
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