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RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-10-24 05:26 PM

There was room in the cage shared with rage
not for flight but for music to wing
and it lifted from off of its page
as a seed in the Spring one would fling,
to have heard you'd be drawn to its stage
and the beauty its melody'd bring
but it's since been engaged
to an icier age
where to sadness it silently clings
and it can't be assuaged
in the terrible wage
of the duty that lonliness wrings,
our dreams persevering
its memory's hearing
a voice we hope may again sing

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-24 05:28 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-10-24 06:45 PM

There was room in the cage shared with rage
not for flight but for music to wing
and it lifted from off of its page
===================================
to have heard you'd be drawn to its stage
and the beauty its melody'd bring
but it's since been engaged
to an icier age
where to sadness it silently clings
and it can't be assuaged
in the terrible wage
of the duty that lonliness wrings,
======================================

*shaking my head*
You had me from the opening lines...
the phrasing..the internal rhymes..the harmonies...this is enchanting, hauntingly, beautiful, impressive writing....

I just heard the melody...and was indeed drawn to its beauty as it lifted off the page....I heard it when I read this awe inspiring write...your poetry sates this moths craving for melancholy rhymes divine...
My only complaint would be that it wasnt longer...say 20-40 lines more

This one goes in my library.
Outstanding work poet sir.

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2002-10-24 07:48 PM

I don't think any of your poems ever put tears in my eyes and made my heart pound, but this one certainly touched me that deeply.

~I hope so, too~

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-10-24 07:51 PM

Richard, I love your work. It's very beautiful. Thanks for sharing with us.

Love To All,
Ethel

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-10-24 07:58 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Richard, this is so deeply touching, sweet friend, someties it is best to rather be deaf of the wicked lies and verbal assaults that can tear each other apart rather than to risk hearing them! (sigh) May perserverance outshadow the griefs of history, sweet friend, this is heartfelt, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!